Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более естественным и связным, например, добавив связующее слово и немного расширив ответ, чтобы он звучал более плавно и информативно.

例: I don't work at the moment because I'm currently in my final year of a bachelor's degree in marketing, so my main focus is on my studies.

提案: Ответ не совсем точный, так как вопрос касается работы, а студент говорит о учебе. Следует отвечать прямо на вопрос и использовать связующие слова для плавности.

例: I don't have a job currently, but I study remotely at a university in Russia, usually from home.

提案: Ответ содержит много коротких предложений, что снижает естественность речи. Рекомендуется объединять предложения и использовать связующие слова для улучшения связности.

例: As I mentioned, I don't work currently, but since I study from home, I consider it my workplace. It's comfortable and quiet, which helps me stay focused.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и разорванные предложения. Следует использовать полные предложения и более точную лексику, а также связующие слова для плавности.

例: I like working from home because it gives me a lot of flexibility. However, in the future, I would prefer to work in an international environment, perhaps at a startup or a tech company.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и разорванные предложения. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова и более точные формулировки для улучшения связности и ясности.

例: In the future, I plan to complete my master's degree in digital business or education technology abroad. After that, I would like to work in an innovative company or start my own project.

× I study. Remotely at the university in Russia.

✓ I study remotely at the university in Russia.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. Combining the two parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× How I mentioned before.

✓ As I mentioned before.

The phrase 'How I mentioned before' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'As I mentioned before' to refer back to a previous statement.

× Well, since I study from home, I could say.

✓ Well, since I study from home, I could say that home is my workplace.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'that home is my workplace' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Because it gives me flexibility litty.

✓ Because it gives me a little flexibility.

The phrase 'flexibility litty' is incorrect. The correct quantifier is 'a little' to indicate a small amount of flexibility.

× But in the future I would prefer to work in international. Environment.

✓ But in the future I would prefer to work in an international environment.

The original sentence incorrectly separates 'international' and 'environment' and misses the article 'an' before 'international environment'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy.

× In the future I plan to complete my masters. Decree in digital business or education technology.

✓ In the future I plan to complete my master's degree in digital business or education technology.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains a spelling error ('Decree' instead of 'degree'). Combining the parts and correcting the spelling makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Abroad after that I I would prefer to work in an innovative company or launch my own project.

✓ After that, I would prefer to work abroad in an innovative company or launch my own project.

The original sentence has word order issues and a repeated word 'I'. Rearranging the sentence and removing the repetition improves clarity and correctness.