Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, for example, stating your job title and company type. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: I currently work as an administration officer in an international company that produces vegetables. My main responsibility is to book flight tickets for my colleagues.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Start with a clear statement about your workplace, then explain your role and why you like it. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I work in an international company based in China as an administration officer. I am responsible for booking flight tickets for my colleagues, and I enjoy this job because it helps me improve my communication skills.

提案: Your answer is relevant but repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to organise your ideas and provide specific reasons why it is a good place to work.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because I get to interact with people from different countries. This helps me improve my communication skills and learn new languages, which I find very rewarding.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I like the place where I work because my colleagues are very friendly and helpful. Moreover, working with people from different countries allows me to learn about new cultures and languages, which helps me develop personally.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to express your future plans clearly and logically.

例: In the future, I want to work in different countries such as Europe and Australia because they have excellent work environments. Working abroad will also help me improve my communication skills and broaden my perspective.

× Currently I'm a walking in a company international company.

✓ Currently I'm working in an international company.

The verb 'walk' is incorrectly used in the '-ing' form here. The correct verb is 'work' to describe employment. Also, the article 'an' is needed before 'international company' because 'international' starts with a vowel sound.

× Currently I'm a walking in a company international company.

✓ Currently I'm working in an international company.

The article 'a' is incorrectly placed before 'company international company'. The correct article is 'an' before 'international' because it starts with a vowel sound, and the phrase should be 'an international company'.

× We're doing produce, vegetable and eternal.

✓ We produce vegetables and internal products.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Doing produce' is not correct; 'produce' is a verb meaning to make or create. Also, 'vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables'. The word 'eternal' seems incorrect in context; possibly 'internal' or another word was intended.

× As a administration officer are usually book ticket.

✓ As an administration officer, I usually book tickets.

The sentence lacks a subject and has article errors. 'Administration' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an' is needed. The verb 'are' is incorrect here; it should be 'I' as the subject. Also, 'ticket' should be plural 'tickets' if more than one is booked.

× As a administration officer are usually book ticket.

✓ As an administration officer, I usually book tickets.

The article 'a' is incorrect before 'administration officer' because 'administration' starts with a vowel sound; 'an' is correct.

× An hour? OK, China's AM. Administration of Sir in the international company and the macho bro is.

✓ Where? OK, I am an administration officer in an international company.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. The question 'An hour?' seems to be a mishearing or miswriting of 'Where?'. The phrase 'China's AM' and 'macho bro is' are unclear and likely incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning.

× To book a flight ticket for my colleagues and I love this job because it allows me to develop the communication skills.

✓ I book flight tickets for my colleagues, and I love this job because it allows me to develop my communication skills.

The sentence lacks a subject at the beginning. 'I' should be the subject performing the action. Also, 'the communication skills' should be 'my communication skills' to indicate possession.

× I love this job because it allows me to develop the communication skills.

✓ I love this job because it allows me to develop my communication skills.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'communication skills'. It should be 'my' to show possession.

× Yeah, it is very nice to work with that different people, especially as a international company you it allows you to talk with the different people in different language and also communication perhaps to improve your communication, communication skills and it's very rewarding.

✓ Yeah, it is very nice to work with different people, especially in an international company. It allows you to talk with different people in different languages and also helps improve your communication skills. It's very rewarding.

The phrase 'that different people' is incorrect; 'different people' is correct. 'As a international company' should be 'in an international company' with the correct article 'an'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Language' should be plural 'languages' when referring to multiple languages. Repetition of 'communication' is unnecessary.

× especially as a international company you it allows you to talk with the different people in different language

✓ especially in an international company, it allows you to talk with different people in different languages

The article 'a' is incorrect before 'international company'; it should be 'an' because 'international' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'language' should be plural 'languages' when referring to multiple languages.

× I would like this place because my colleagues, they are very friendly and also wanted to help people, people who in need and also because of the different country there's a lot of.

✓ I like this place because my colleagues are very friendly and also want to help people who are in need. Also, because of the different countries, there are a lot of people from different backgrounds.

The sentence has redundant pronouns ('my colleagues, they'), incorrect verb tense ('wanted' should be 'want'), and incomplete phrases ('people who in need' should be 'people who are in need'). The last part is incomplete and needs clarification.

× people who in need

✓ people who are in need

The verb 'are' is missing before the prepositional phrase 'in need'. The correct phrase is 'people who are in need'.

× because of the different country there's a lot of. People from different background

✓ because of the different countries, there are a lot of people from different backgrounds

'Country' should be plural 'countries' to match 'different'. 'Background' should be plural 'backgrounds' to agree with 'people'.

× and it allows you to new different culture and a new language.

✓ and it allows you to learn different cultures and new languages.

The verb 'new' is incorrectly used; it should be 'learn'. Also, 'culture' and 'language' should be plural to match 'different' and the context.

× And also it helps me develop the.

✓ And also it helps me develop my skills.

The sentence is incomplete. Adding 'my skills' completes the thought. 'Develop' is correctly used here as a base verb after 'helps me'.

× I wanna work in a different countries like Europe and an Australian because these countries are all my dream countries is because they have very good work environment and also it helps you develop their communication skills and abroad is my perspective.

✓ I want to work in different countries like Europe and Australia because these countries are my dream destinations. They have very good work environments and also help you develop your communication skills. Working abroad is my goal.

'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is correct. 'A different countries' is incorrect; 'different countries' without 'a' is correct. 'An Australian' should be 'Australia' as a country name. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Their communication skills' should be 'your communication skills' to match the subject. 'Abroad is my perspective' is unclear; 'Working abroad is my goal' is clearer.