Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Следует использовать артикли и правильные предлоги, например, "I am a student and I am studying a marketing program." Также можно добавить немного деталей, чтобы ответ был более содержательным.

例: I am a student currently studying a marketing program at university.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и не отвечает на вопрос напрямую, так как вопрос о работе, а студент говорит о месте учёбы. Следует сначала уточнить, что вы не работаете, а затем ответить на вопрос. Также нужно улучшить структуру предложения и убрать лишние паузы.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am a full-time student at a state university in Omsk, Russia.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз и повторов. Следует отвечать чётко и связно, используя связующие слова. Можно сказать, что вы не работаете, но учитесь онлайн, поэтому не имеете опыта работы в каком-либо месте.

例: As I mentioned before, I don't have a job currently. I study through an online program, so I haven't worked at any place yet.

提案: Ответ слишком короткий и неестественный. Следует использовать более плавные и полные предложения, а также добавить объяснение или мнение, чтобы сделать ответ более содержательным.

例: I don't have a job right now, so I haven't thought much about where I'd like to work in the future.

提案: Ответ содержит паузы и не очень плавный. Следует использовать связующие слова и более естественные выражения, чтобы сделать ответ более связным и информативным.

例: In the near future, I plan to start my own business. Specifically, I am going to develop a startup focused on educational technologies within the next few months.

× I'm a student and I study marketing program.

✓ I'm a student and I study a marketing program.

The noun 'program' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I study in a Russian. University which is state in Omsk.

✓ I study at a Russian university which is state-owned in Omsk.

The correct preposition for institutions like universities is 'at' not 'in'. Also, 'state' should be 'state-owned' to describe the university properly.

× I study in a Russian. University which is state in Omsk.

✓ I study at a Russian university which is state-owned in Omsk.

Repeated for clarity: 'at' is the correct preposition for educational institutions, and 'state-owned' correctly describes the university's status.

× How I mentioned before, I I don't work. And where I sorry. I don't go. The. Specially I study with online program.

✓ As I mentioned before, I don't work. Also, I don't go anywhere because I study through an online program.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct use of expressions like 'As I mentioned before' and 'study through an online program'.

× Specially I study with online program.

✓ Especially, I study with an online program.

The noun 'program' is singular and requires the article 'an' before it. Also, 'Specially' should be 'Especially' to convey the intended meaning.

× I don't have a work.

✓ I don't have work.

The noun 'work' is uncountable in this context and does not require the article 'a'.

× I don't have a place where I'd like to work.

✓ I don't have a place where I'd like to work.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I'm going to work with my own business.

✓ I'm going to work on my own business.

The correct preposition with 'work' in this context is 'on' rather than 'with'.

× In a few months I'm. Going to. Develop startup in educational technologies.

✓ In a few months, I'm going to develop a startup in educational technologies.

The noun 'startup' is singular and requires the article 'a' before it.