Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some confusing phrases like 'scanned RE education' and 'level curled'. Try to give a clear and direct response with simple, correct vocabulary. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: I am a student and I recently completed my secondary education at Gruver Christians Public School.

提案: You answered the question directly but repeated the same idea twice. Try to avoid redundancy and use a more natural way to express your situation.

例: I am currently a student, so I haven't started working yet.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive. You can improve by using linking words and making your response more natural and fluent.

例: Since I am a student and haven't worked yet, I don't have experience with any workplace to comment on.

提案: Your answer is polite but repetitive. Try to vary your sentence structures and use linking words to make your answer more engaging.

例: Because I am still a student without work experience, I cannot say whether I would like a workplace or not.

提案: Your answer is good and detailed but contains some minor grammar mistakes and awkward phrases. Try to use correct grammar and smoother expressions to improve clarity.

例: I plan to go abroad for further studies to enhance my skills. After completing my education, I intend to return to my home country and start my own business, which I believe will help the local economy and create jobs.

× Well I'm a student and I recently completed my scanned RE education from Gruver Christians Public School for level curled.

✓ Well, I'm a student and I recently completed my secondary education from Gruver Christians Public School for level curled.

The phrase 'scanned RE education' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Assuming the intended phrase is 'secondary education', which fits the context. The past tense 'completed' is correct here as the action is finished.

× As I earlier said, I am a student so I did not work anywhere.

✓ As I said earlier, I am a student so I have not worked anywhere.

The phrase 'did not work anywhere' is simple past tense, but since the student is currently a student and the action is relevant up to now, present perfect 'have not worked' is more appropriate.

× I do not work anywhere till now.

✓ I have not worked anywhere till now.

The phrase 'do not work anywhere till now' mixes present simple with a time expression 'till now' that requires present perfect tense 'have not worked' to indicate an action that has not happened up to the present.

× As I earlier mentioned, I am currently a student so I do not work anywhere at the moment, so I don't know about the place or workplace.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I am currently a student so I do not work anywhere at the moment, so I don't know about the place or workplace.

The phrase 'As I earlier mentioned' is better as 'As I mentioned earlier' for natural word order. The rest of the sentence is correct in present tense.

× As I earlier mentioned, I'm currently a student.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm currently a student.

Same as above, 'As I earlier mentioned' should be 'As I mentioned earlier' for correct adverb placement.

× I do not have any work experience yet, so I cannot really comment about the work or the place where I'm doing the work.

✓ I do not have any work experience yet, so I cannot really comment about the work or the place where I would be doing the work.

Since the student is currently not working, 'where I'm doing the work' is incorrect. It should be 'where I would be doing the work' to indicate hypothetical or future situation.

× Well, I plan to go abroad for my further studies because I want to explore an enhance my skills.

✓ Well, I plan to go abroad for my further studies because I want to explore and enhance my skills.

The phrase 'an enhance' is incorrect; it should be 'and enhance' to connect two verbs properly.

× After completing my education, I will definitely return to my native country and start my own business as I believe it will allow me to contribute a contributes to the local economy and create job opportunities.

✓ After completing my education, I will definitely return to my native country and start my own business as I believe it will allow me to contribute to the local economy and create job opportunities.

The phrase 'contribute a contributes to' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'contribute to' without 'a contributes'. This fixes the verb usage and preposition.