Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words like "this this" and try to form a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words. For example, start with "I currently work at Tim Horton's," then explain how it benefits you.

例: I currently work at Tim Horton's, which helps me improve my communication skills because I interact with many customers daily.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use the present tense and correct sentence structure. Also, be direct and specific about the location.

例: I work at Tim Horton's, which is located in Brampton.

提案: Your answer covers good points but can be improved by using linking words and avoiding repetition of "you may." Also, correct minor grammar mistakes and make the answer more natural.

例: Indeed, it is a great place to work because I get to interact with many customers, which helps me improve my communication skills. Moreover, I meet people from diverse backgrounds, allowing me to learn about different cultures and languages.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms and clearer sentences. Also, link your ideas logically.

例: Yes, definitely. I love working there because I have good relationships with my team members. I enjoy being part of the team, and I am improving my communication skills by interacting with many customers from diverse backgrounds, which also helps me learn new languages.

提案: Your answer is clear and direct but could be expanded slightly to show more detail or reasoning, which would improve your score.

例: I want to be a police officer in the future because I am interested in helping people and ensuring community safety.

× Yes, I work at Tim Horton's nowadays.

✓ Yes, I work at Tim Horton's nowadays.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Nowadays' is acceptable here to indicate current employment.

× This this job helps me to improve my communication skills and I interact with a lot of customers.

✓ This job helps me to improve my communication skills and I interact with a lot of customers.

The repetition of 'this' is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'this' corrects the sentence structure.

× I will get Tim Horton's and it used located in Brampton.

✓ I work at Tim Horton's, and it is located in Brampton.

The original sentence is unclear and contains tense and structure errors. 'I will get Tim Horton's' is incorrect; the student likely meant 'I work at Tim Horton's.' Also, 'it used located' is incorrect; it should be 'it is located.' The corrected sentence uses present tense to match the context.

× Indeed, it is really good place to work.

✓ Indeed, it is a really good place to work.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really good place.' In English, singular countable nouns require an article.

× You may learn know more about their background and their different cultures and different languages.

✓ You may learn more about their backgrounds, different cultures, and different languages.

The phrase 'learn know' is incorrect; only one verb is needed. Also, 'background' should be plural 'backgrounds' to match 'their.' The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, definitely. I love the place where I work because they're I. Book with the many team members.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love the place where I work because there I work with many team members.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect phrases: 'they're I. Book' is likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'there I work with.' Also, 'the many team members' should be 'many team members' without 'the.'

× I enjoying being a team member and I improving my communication skills.

✓ I enjoy being a team member and I am improving my communication skills.

The verbs 'enjoying' and 'improving' are incorrectly used without auxiliary verbs. The correct forms are 'I enjoy' (simple present) and 'I am improving' (present continuous).

× I interact with many customers, many people from diverse backgrounds or used to learn new language there.

✓ I interact with many customers and many people from diverse backgrounds, and I use it to learn new languages there.

The phrase 'or used to learn new language there' is incorrect. It should be 'and I use it to learn new languages there.' Also, 'new language' should be plural 'new languages' to match the context.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is awkward. The correct form to ask about current feelings is 'Do you like the place where you work?'

× I want to be a police officer.

✓ I want to be a police officer.

This sentence is correct as it expresses a future intention using 'want to be.' No correction needed.