Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, for example, state your current status and what you are preparing for. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases.

例: I am currently a student. I recently completed my senior secondary education and now I am preparing for my university entrance exams.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating phrases like 'as I mentioned earlier'. Just answer directly.

例: I am a student at the moment, so I am not working anywhere currently.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Since you are not working, you can talk about your study place instead, describing it clearly and naturally.

例: Although I am not working, the place where I study is very nice and peaceful, which helps me focus on my studies.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Since you are not working, you can talk about the place you study or would like to work. Use clear sentences and correct grammar.

例: Yes, I like the place where I study. It is located in a good area and the environment is eco-friendly.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to structure your answer with a clear plan, using correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: First, I will focus on completing my studies with good grades. After that, I plan to work for multinational companies, especially in IT hubs like Bangalore.

× Basically I'm a student, recently I passed my seniors country and currently I'm preparing for my hostages and improved.

✓ Basically I'm a student, recently I passed my senior's country exam and currently I'm preparing for my hostages and improving.

The phrase 'passed my seniors country' is unclear and likely a misuse of past tense and noun forms. 'Passed' is correct as past tense, but 'seniors country' seems incorrect. It should be 'senior's country exam' or a similar phrase. Also, 'improved' should be 'improving' to indicate ongoing action.

× Basically I'm a student, recently I passed my seniors country and currently I'm preparing for my hostages and improved.

✓ Basically, I'm a student. Recently, I passed my senior's country exam, and currently, I'm preparing for my hostages and improving.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Breaking it into smaller sentences improves clarity and readability.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original sentence has an extra '>' character which is a typographical error and should be removed.

× As I mentioned earlier, I'm not working but where I was studying so that though that is the beautiful thing.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm not working, but the place where I was studying is a beautiful place.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. Reordering and clarifying the sentence improves understanding.

× How is definitely I like that means we have a working. So it is very good area and it is a eco friendly.

✓ Yes, definitely I like it because we have work there. It is a very good area and it is eco-friendly.

The original sentence misuses 'How is' and 'means we have a working'. Also, 'a eco friendly' should be 'an eco-friendly'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy.

× Firstly I will focusing on my studies as when I completed my studies with good previous then I will work for some multinational companies like IT hubs a blanket.

✓ Firstly, I will focus on my studies. When I complete my studies with good grades, then I will work for some multinational companies like IT hubs and Bangalore.

'Will focusing' is incorrect; it should be 'will focus' for future tense. 'Completed' should be 'complete' to match future context. 'Good previous' is unclear and replaced with 'good grades'. 'A blanket' seems a mishearing of 'Bangalore'.