Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较简短，表达不够自然，专业名称应准确且连贯。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并补充一些细节。

例: I am currently a postgraduate student specializing in Sports Culture and Management. I find this field fascinating because it combines my passion for sports with business skills.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，信息重复。建议直接回答是否工作，并简洁说明身份。

例: I am not working at the moment because I am a postgraduate student studying Sports Culture and Management.

提案: 回答内容不连贯，表达不清晰，缺少具体细节。建议用完整句子描述工作环境，并提供具体理由。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment is comfortable and the facilities are excellent, which helps me focus on my tasks.

提案: 回答表达混乱，信息不明确。建议清晰表达想工作地点及原因，使用连贯句子。

例: I would like to work in Beijing because it is the capital of China and offers excellent medical resources and educational opportunities.

提案: 回答内容不明确且语法错误严重，无法理解。建议明确表达未来职业规划，使用简单清晰的句子。

例: In the future, I plan to work in urban sports management in a major city in China, where I can apply my knowledge and skills to promote healthy lifestyles.

× I haven't to work now.

✓ I don't have to work now.

学生错误地使用了 'haven't to'，正确的表达是 'don't have to' 来表示不需要做某事。'have to' 是情态动词短语，否定形式应为 'don't have to'。

× I'm a graduate Emma, a post graduate student majoring in sports culture, a culture and management.

✓ I'm a graduate student, a postgraduate student majoring in sports culture and management.

句中 'a graduate Emma' 可能是口误，应为 'graduate student'。'a culture and management' 中 'culture' 不应有冠词且应与 'management' 并列，故改为 'sports culture and management'。

× Yes, it's a good place to work 'cause in my purse and Cottagers. Very nice. And. This gives me a. Comfortable working place.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work because my supervisors and colleagues are very nice. This gives me a comfortable working place.

原句结构混乱，'in my purse and Cottagers' 可能是 'my supervisors and colleagues' 的误听或拼写错误。需要调整句子结构使其通顺。

× I want to work in Beijing. Close page 8 Zero capital of China and there has been a little hassle. A mother. Medical resources and education. So I want you work in Beijing.

✓ I want to work in Beijing, the capital of China, which has good medical resources and education. So I want to work in Beijing.

原句中 'Close page 8 Zero' 无意义，应为 'the capital'。'there has been a little hassle' 语义不清，改为 'which has good medical resources and education' 更符合表达。

× In the future I want to work as a picture in. You mean you were city of China? As I. Do as I did the rivers.

✓ In the future, I want to work as a teacher in a city in China, as I did before.

原句语法混乱，'work as a picture' 应为 'work as a teacher'，'You mean you were city of China?' 无意义，改为 'in a city in China'，'As I. Do as I did the rivers.' 也不通顺，改为 'as I did before'。