Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达有误，建议用完整句子表达职业和工作部门，避免断句。

例: I have been working as a logistics supervisor in the operations department for five years.

提案: 回答重复且语法不准确，建议简洁明了地说明工作地点，并避免重复。

例: I have been working in Shanghai since I graduated from university.

提案: 表达不流畅，有语法错误，建议用连贯句子说明理由，并使用连接词。

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because it is close to my home, so commuting is very convenient.

提案: 表达混乱且语法错误较多，建议清晰表达不喜欢的原因，使用连贯句子和具体细节。

例: Actually, I don't like my current workplace because it is noisy and the warehouse environment is unpleasant due to strong smells.

提案: 回答不连贯且语法错误，建议用完整句子表达未来计划，说明具体目标和理由。

例: In the future, I plan to change my job to one related to my major, and I also want to work in a better environment.

× I have been working for five years as logistical. Supervisor. Add a operation department.

✓ I have been working for five years as a logistics supervisor in the operations department.

这里'supervisor'和'department'是单数，前面需要加冠词'a'。'logistical'应改为名词形式'logistics'，并且句子结构需要调整使其通顺。

× I have been working for five years as logistical. Supervisor. Add a operation department.

✓ I have been working for five years as a logistics supervisor in the operations department.

原句断句不合理，导致表达不清晰。需要合并成完整句子，明确职位和部门。

× OK, I am working in Shanghai. Since I graduated from the university I work, I have been working in Shanghai.

✓ OK, I am working in Shanghai. Since I graduated from university, I have been working here.

原句中'Since I graduated from the university I work'结构混乱，时态和句子结构错误。应使用现在完成进行时表达从毕业到现在一直在上海工作。

× Since I graduated from the university I work, I have been working in Shanghai.

✓ Since I graduated from university, I have been working in Shanghai.

在表达毕业时，通常说'graduated from university'，不加定冠词'the'，除非特指某所大学。

× Yes, I I think is a good place to work and is.

✓ Yes, I think it is a good place to work.

缺少主语'it'，且重复'I'，导致句子不完整和冗余。

× This place is close to my home so I think it's very convenient and I go to the work.

✓ This place is close to my home, so I think it's very convenient for me to go to work.

'go to the work'中'the'不应出现，且缺少介词'for me'使句子更通顺。

× Actually I don't like the place I am work now be 'cause the environment is it pretty.

✓ Actually, I don't like the place where I work now because the environment is not very good.

'I am work'应改为'where I work'，'be 'cause'应为'because'，'is it pretty'表达不清，应改为'not very good'。

× Actually I don't like the place I am work now be 'cause the environment is it pretty.

✓ Actually, I don't like the place where I work now because the environment is quite noisy.

'pretty'用法不当，形容环境时应使用'noisy'等更具体的形容词。

× Noise and it will always be, 'cause I am in the warehouse, people under I can smell the.

✓ It is always noisy because I work in the warehouse, and I can smell unpleasant odors from below.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，表达不完整，需要重组句子使其通顺。

× In the future, I plan to change a job and I want to find a job first. Ratchet to my. Major and 2nd is I want to find a good environment. Workplace, yeah.

✓ In the future, I plan to change my job. First, I want to find a job related to my major, and secondly, I want to find a good working environment.

'Ratchet to my'应为'related to my'，句子断裂且表达不完整，需使用正确的词汇和连接词。