Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は全体的に内容が伝わりますが、文法ミスや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば「for one. Ear an」は意味が不明瞭で、正確な期間を明確に述べる必要があります。また、文を簡潔にし、自然な英語表現を使うことが重要です。

例: I work full-time as a nurse at a beauty clinic, where I help patients with their skin care treatments. I have been working there for one year, and I really enjoy helping people improve their confidence.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。特に「foreigners bigger」や「it's excellent service is the clinic has many branches」という部分は意味が通りません。文を整理し、具体的で明確な説明を心がけましょう。

例: I work at Show Namby Beauty Clinic, which is a well-known company in Japan and popular among foreigners. The clinic has many branches and is highly regarded for its excellent service.

提案: 回答は明確で論理的に構成されていますが、さらに自然な表現を使い、接続詞を増やすとより良くなります。例えば「because」や「also」の使い方を工夫し、文の流れを滑らかにしましょう。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because my colleagues are kind and friendly, creating a comfortable environment. Moreover, the clinic is conveniently located near the station, which makes commuting easy and helps me save time and reduce stress.

提案: 文中の「I will really like a place where I work pictures」は意味が不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りがあります。質問に対して直接的に答え、理由を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: Yes, I really like the place where I work because my colleagues are kind and friendly. I also have many opportunities to learn new nursing skills, which helps me improve my abilities. Overall, the supportive environment makes it a great workplace.

提案: 内容は良いですが、「starting a nursing」という表現は不自然です。具体的に何をしているのかを明確にし、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。

例: My future goal is to become a nurse in Canada. I want to work as an international nurse because I am passionate about helping people from different countries. To prepare, I am currently studying nursing and improving my English skills.

× I have been working there full time for one. Ear an I really enjoy helping people improve their confidence.

✓ I have been working there full time for one year and I really enjoy helping people improve their confidence.

The original sentence contains a typo and incomplete phrase 'one. Ear an' which should be corrected to 'one year and' to make the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original sentence contains an incorrect punctuation mark '>' after the question mark. It should be removed to correct the sentence structure.

× It is a well known company not only in Japan but also among foreigners bigger, so it's excellent service is the clinic has many branches and a good reputation in the industry.

✓ It is a well-known company not only in Japan but also among foreigners, so it has excellent service, many branches, and a good reputation in the industry.

The original sentence is confusing and contains grammatical errors. 'foreigners bigger' is incorrect and unclear. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, including adding commas and correcting phrases.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is unnatural in this context. The correct form to ask about current feelings is 'Do you like the place where you work?'.

× Yes, I will really like a place where I work pictures.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains the word 'pictures' which is out of context. The corrected sentence expresses the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.

× I am currently preparing by starting a nursing and improving my English skills.

✓ I am currently preparing by studying nursing and improving my English skills.

The phrase 'starting a nursing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'studying nursing' to indicate the action of learning the subject.