Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific details (which ad, what product, and why it impressed you). Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes — one advertisement that stayed with me was for a compact cassette player on the Naftal channel when I was ten. I remember the bright colours and upbeat music because the ad showed a child enjoying music with friends, which made me want to buy the player to listen to songs and share them with others.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main point and simplify sentences. Answer directly (yes or no) then explain with one or two precise examples: where you see ads, what types, and why trains are notable. Reduce fillers and repetition, use linking words like "however" or "for example."

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains. For example, many car and phone ads are pasted inside carriages and on station walls, which makes trains an effective place for advertisers because they reach many commuters every day.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Start with a simple topic sentence like "Yes, I do" and follow with two concrete reasons (e.g. information and entertainment). Avoid vague phrases and unclear vocabulary; use precise expressions like "learning about new products" or "useful deals."

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I find ads useful because they inform me about new products and special offers, and they can be entertaining when they use humour or music. For instance, a short video ad that explains a phone's new features helped me decide to buy it.

Sugerencia: Be specific about the types of ads and give an example showing why you like them. Use linking words like "because" and keep sentences short. Mention a particular ad style (demonstration, tutorial) and explain how it helped you.

Ejemplo: I prefer ads that demonstrate musical instruments or audio gear because they show how products work. For example, a demo video of headphones that compares sound quality helped me choose a pair that improved my listening experience.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and then give a brief specific example. Use correct collocations ("see ads", "skip ads") and avoid awkward phrasing. Mention which platforms and what kinds of ads (video, banner) you encounter and whether they are useful.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer. For example, YouTube shows video ads before content and social media apps display sponsored posts about gadgets, which often introduce me to new electronic devices.

× That helps, that helped me to know about the various latest trend and also that put a positive impact on me to buy the new electronic devices.

✓ That helped me learn about various latest trends and had a positive impact on my decision to buy new electronic devices.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly ('helps' and 'helped'). Use past tense 'helped' to match 'When I was a child'. 'Know about' is better expressed as 'learn about'. 'Trend' should be plural 'trends'. 'Put a positive impact on me to buy' is unnatural; use 'had a positive impact on my decision to buy'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense and use natural collocations like 'learn about trends' and 'had a positive impact on my decision'.

× Basically, I do not prefer to go on the Hangouts as well as on the other travelling places, but whenever I went to see any park or other things and I see I see any travelling method, then the trains are the most adjusted advertisement policy that can be vary by each train and that's why.

✓ I usually do not go to hangouts or travel much, but when I visit parks or other places and see different modes of transport, trains tend to have the most varied advertising policies, which can differ from train to train.

The original sentence is incoherent and has repetition ('I see I see') and mixed tenses. Rebuild sentence to be clear: use present 'usually do not go' for habit, 'when I visit' for occasions, and clarify that 'trains have varied advertising policies' and 'differ from train to train'. Remove redundant phrases and correct word choice ('travelling places' -> 'places', 'most adjusted advertisement policy' -> 'most varied advertising policies'). Suggestion: Break complex ideas into shorter clauses and use consistent tense.

× That are the only source of the social media as well as the offline method that can help the people to know about the new latest end of the society and also to follow the new qualities.

✓ They are one of the main sources on social media and offline channels that help people learn about the latest trends in society and follow new standards.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'That are' is incorrect; 'they are' or 'that is' must agree with plural/singular. 'The new latest end of the society' is meaningless; replace with 'the latest trends in society'. 'Follow the new qualities' is unclear; use 'follow new standards' or 'adopt new trends'. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree and use clear collocations like 'help people learn about the latest trends'.

× Electronic devices that can improve the gala time as well as the living standard.

✓ Electronic devices can improve leisure time as well as living standards.

Fragment lacking a finite verb and unclear vocabulary ('gala time'). Make it a full sentence using 'can improve' and replace 'gala time' with 'leisure time'. Use plural 'living standards' to match general meaning. Suggestion: Always include a verb to make a complete sentence and use common collocations like 'leisure time' and 'living standards'.

× Generally, I like the advertisement that are often made for promoting some instruments such as the music instrument that helps me to know about the various trends of the music and also to you how to use them.

✓ Generally, I like advertisements that promote instruments, such as musical instruments, which help me learn about various music trends and how to use them.

Article and plural errors: 'the advertisement that are' should be 'advertisements that'. 'Music instrument' should be 'musical instruments'. 'To you how to use them' is incorrect; use 'how to use them'. 'Which help me learn' is clearer than 'that helps me to know'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general statements and correct adjective forms like 'musical instruments'. Keep relative clauses clear ('which help me learn').

× As I am fond of listening to music as it helps me to refresh my mind and advertisement can help me to know about the various equipments.

✓ I am fond of listening to music because it helps refresh my mind, and advertisements can help me learn about various pieces of equipment.

Run-on and incorrect noun forms: 'equipment' is uncountable, so use 'pieces of equipment' or just 'equipment'. 'As I am fond' and 'as it helps' form an awkward structure; use 'because'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use 'because' for reason, pluralize 'advertisements', and use correct count/uncount forms for 'equipment'.

× Definitely, as I often avoid a considerable amount of advertisement whenever I am using my smartphone or the computer.

✓ Definitely, I often avoid a considerable number of advertisements when I use my smartphone or computer.

Use 'number' with countable 'advertisements' rather than 'amount'. 'A considerable amount of advertisement' is incorrect. Avoid unnecessary progressive 'am using' when stating a habitual action—use simple present 'use'. Suggestion: Use 'a considerable number of advertisements' and simple present for habits.

× As whenever I move to use YouTube or other social media platforms that help me to know about the social trends, a lot of advertisement are presented in front of me that helps me to know about the new electronic devices.

✓ When I use YouTube or other social media platforms that show social trends, many advertisements appear that help me learn about new electronic devices.

Article and agreement errors: 'a lot of advertisement are' should be 'many advertisements appear'—use plural and correct verb 'appear'. 'Move to use' is unnatural; use 'use'. Remove redundant phrases 'presented in front of me that helps me to know' and replace with concise 'appear that help me learn'. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing, correct plural forms, and simple present for regular occurrences.