Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear slang like "SUS" and correct grammar (e.g., verb forms and articles). Use a linking word to connect your reason.

Ejemplo: Yes. I remember several emotional TV ads from my childhood, especially insurance commercials. For example, one ad showed a family supporting each other during hard times, which was very moving and stayed with me.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, correct vocabulary and word order, and add a brief specific example. Use a linking word to connect general statement and example (e.g., "for example").

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many adverts on public transport. For example, trains and buses often display posters for snacks and local schools, especially near the doors and windows.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and sentence structure, and include a brief reason with one linking word (e.g., "because"). Avoid fragments and make verbs agree with subjects.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my favourite TV shows. For instance, sudden commercial breaks ruin the mood and make it hard to follow the story.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and add one specific example that explains why you prefer that kind of ad. Use a linking word such as "because" or "for example".

Ejemplo: I prefer emotional advertisements because they tell personal stories that I can relate to. For example, an insurance ad showing a real family's recovery after an accident made the message memorable and persuasive.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "earn revenue" instead of "get the incomes"), and give a concise example of where you see ads. Remove filler words like "Uh".

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see ads on my phone, especially in popular apps and streaming sites. For example, short video ads appear before videos and they often break my concentration while working.

× In Thailand, we have many famous advertisements because they are really motivated and emotional, especially the insurance advertisements, which are really SUS.

✓ In Thailand, we have many famous advertisements because they are very moving and emotional, especially the insurance advertisements, which are really successful.

The student used 'motivated' and 'SUS' incorrectly. 'Motivated' describes people, not ads; 'moving' or 'emotionally powerful' fits better. 'SUS' is unclear/slang; likely meant 'successful' or 'memorable'. Use appropriate adjectives for advertisements.

× Yes, there are a lot of commercials on Tran public transportation, especially the snacks and schools advertisements.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of commercials on Thai public transportation, especially advertisements for snacks and schools.

The phrase 'Tran public transportation' is incorrect; likely 'Thai public transportation'. Word order and prepositions: use 'on' public transportation and rephrase 'snacks and schools advertisements' to 'advertisements for snacks and schools'.

× No, I always hate it when during watching my favorite TV series and that is sudden interruption of advertisements.

✓ No, I always hate it when my favorite TV series is interrupted suddenly by advertisements.

Pronouns and clause structure are incorrect. Remove 'during watching' and use passive 'is interrupted' to express the interruption. 'That is sudden interruption' is ungrammatical; use 'is interrupted suddenly'.

× It break my emotion.

✓ It breaks my mood.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'It' requires third person singular verb 'breaks'. 'Emotion' is not the usual collocation; 'mood' or 'concentration' fits better.

× It's always tell a story about the real experience.

✓ It always tells a story about real experiences.

With subject 'It' (singular), the verb needs third person singular form 'tells'. Also adjust 'the real experience' to plural or remove article: 'real experiences' is more natural.

× Yes, especially the popular applications. I think they get the incomes from these advertisements.

✓ Yes, especially on popular applications. I think they get income from these advertisements.

Use preposition 'on' for applications. 'Incomes' is wrong in this context; use uncountable 'income'. Alternatively 'revenue' works. Also keep consistent subject reference.

× Uh, I feel that it breaks my concentration.

✓ I feel that they interrupt my concentration.

Pronoun reference: 'it' is unclear; 'they' (advertisements) is clearer. 'Breaks my concentration' is understandable but 'interrupt my concentration' is more natural. Also avoid filler 'Uh' in formal responses.