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Sugerencia: 문장 구조를 좀 더 명확하게 하고 불필요한 중복(예: 'umm', 반복된 단어)을 제거하세요. 주제 문장을 분명히 말한 뒤 광고의 특징(예: 제품, 멜로디, 등장인물)과 이유(왜 인상 깊었는지)를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예: 주제 문장 → 세부 묘사 → 이유. 발음에서 'catchy'와 같은 단어 발음을 정확히 연습하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, there was one snack commercial that I remember vividly from my childhood. It featured a catchy jingle and colorful mascots, which made it very memorable. Because the tune was so repetitive and upbeat, it stayed in my head for years and I could still hum it now.

Sugerencia: 간단명료한 주제 문장 뒤에 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 문법(단수/복수, 관사)과 어순을 점검하고 불완전한 구문을 고치세요. 연결어(예: 'for example', 'such as')로 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport, especially on subways and buses. For example, stations have posters on the walls and trains often have digital screens showing short video ads and product promotions.

Sugerencia: 의견을 더 명확하고 정중하게 표현하세요. 'not really' 같은 표현 뒤에 이유를 하나나 두 개로 구체화하고 불필요한 반복과 말버릇을 줄이세요. 어휘 선택을 정확히 하여 'unknowing' 대신 적절한 형용사를 사용하세요(예: intrusive, annoying).

Ejemplo: Not really. I usually find ads intrusive, especially online. When I watch YouTube videos, ads often interrupt my viewing, so I tend to skip them as soon as the option appears.

Sugerencia: 선호를 먼저 분명히 말하고 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 의미가 모호한 표현('as if unfunny', 'ways of it's waste of time')을 피하세요. 연결어(therefore, so, because)를 사용해 결과를 명확히 하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer humorous advertisements because they entertain me and hold my attention. As a result, I don't feel like watching them is a waste of time, and I'm more likely to remember the brand name afterward.

Sugerencia: 의견을 먼저 분명히 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 단어 선택을 정확히 하고 어순을 고치세요('target'은 동사/형용사로 정리). 불필요한 중복과 말더듬을 줄이세요. 'creepy' 같은 감정 표현을 연결어로 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads on my phone and computer all the time. Many of them seem targeted based on my browsing history, which can feel a bit intrusive and sometimes even creepy.

× The song was so addictive that I that it got stuck in my head for years.

✓ The song was so addictive that it got stuck in my head for years.

The original contains an extra word 'that' creating an ungrammatical clause. Remove the repeated 'that' so the past participle construction 'got stuck' correctly follows the clause. Suggestion: read sentences aloud and remove duplicated words.

× Yes, especially on subways or bus.

✓ Yes, especially on subways or buses.

The sentence mixes plural 'subways' with singular 'bus'. Use the plural form 'buses' to match 'subways' or make both singular ('a subway or a bus'). Suggestion: ensure parallel items in a list share number.

× The words are and screen are plastered with posters and digital screen promoting products.

✓ The walls and screens are plastered with posters and digital displays promoting products.

Original has word order and noun mismatch problems ('words are and screen'). Recast to a clear subject ('walls and screens') and use plural 'displays' to match 'posters'. Also add 'promoting' correctly modifying 'posters and displays'. Suggestion: identify intended subjects and ensure verbs and modifiers attach correctly.

× I found them umm, quite unknowing.

✓ I find them, um, quite annoying.

'Unknowing' is inappropriate here; the intended meaning is 'annoying'. Also tense should be present 'find' to match habitual preference. Suggestion: choose correct adjective for meaning and match present tense when stating general likes.

× I often interrupt the YouTube when I'm when I'm watching uh, and I want to press the skip button.

✓ I often get interrupted by YouTube ads when I'm watching, and I want to press the skip button.

Original misuses 'interrupt' making the student the agent. Correct passive 'get interrupted by YouTube ads' or active 'YouTube ads interrupt me'. Remove repeated phrase and keep clear subject. Suggestion: decide agent vs patient and use passive if the speaker is affected.

× I enjoy watching humorous or funny as if unfunny.

✓ I enjoy watching humorous or funny advertisements.

Original contains confusing phrase 'as if unfunny' which makes no sense. Simplify to 'humorous or funny advertisements'. Suggestion: remove contradictory or unclear modifiers and state the preference directly.

× If it's on is funny I don't feel it's ways of it's waste of time and so I remember the brand names well.

✓ If an ad is funny, I don't feel it's a waste of time, and I remember the brand names well.

Original has multiple extra words and wrong phrase 'ways of it's waste'. Correct clause order, add article 'a', and use 'ad' to clarify subject. Suggestion: break long ideas into clauses and use articles where needed.

× Yes, of course I constantly, umm, I what you target as as everywhere.

✓ Yes, of course, constantly I see targeted ads everywhere.

Original sentence fragments and repetition ('as as') create confusion. Rephrase to 'I see targeted ads everywhere' to express the idea. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb present and remove filler repetitions.

× The algorithm shows me as based on my browsing history, which is sometimes a bit crisp.

✓ The algorithm shows me ads based on my browsing history, which is sometimes a bit creepy.

'Shows me as' should be 'shows me ads'; 'crisp' is wrong word choice for the intended meaning 'creepy'. Use correct noun 'ads' and adjective 'creepy'. Suggestion: choose words that fit common collocations (e.g., 'ads based on history', 'a bit creepy').