Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers like "you know" and redundant phrasing. Also use correct grammar (e.g., "main reason is" → "The main reason was").

Ejemplo: No, I can't recall any memorable ads from my childhood. The main reason was that my parents limited my TV time so I focused on studying and reading instead.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence then one precise reason with improved grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases with specific vocabulary (e.g., "deliver a message" → "reach commuters").

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and buses. This is because public transport reaches many commuters, so companies use these spaces to promote products and increase sales.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly and provide one specific example with a linking phrase. Avoid repeating the same adjective. Use a variety of phrases to describe annoyance.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my viewing experience. For instance, YouTube often shows three or four ads between videos, which breaks the flow and is frustrating.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and succinctly. If you don't like ads, explain one clear reason with correct grammar and a brief example. Avoid long, unclear clauses.

Ejemplo: I don't really like advertising because it encourages unnecessary consumption. For example, flashy product ads often persuade people to buy items they don't need.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence, a clear reason, and one specific example. Remove fillers like "umm" and use plural agreement ("advertisements").

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads more often on my phone than on my computer because I use my phone daily for social media. For example, I frequently encounter sponsored posts on Facebook and Instagram.

× Main reason is that I was not allowed to watch TV shows when I was a kid because my parents helped me to study more and focus more on readings or you know, other activities.

✓ The main reason is that I was not allowed to watch TV shows when I was a kid because my parents wanted me to study more and focus more on reading or other activities.

The original uses 'helped me to study' which implies a past completed action rather than an ongoing intention; 'wanted me to study' fits the context better. 'Readings' is incorrect as an uncountable noun here; use 'reading' or 'other activities'. Also add the definite article 'The' before 'main reason' for natural English. Suggestion: Use 'wanted me to' to express parental intent and 'reading' as the activity noun.

× Main reason of that is this is the most popular and common way to deliver product, a message to the public to boost the sales.

✓ The main reason for that is that this is the most popular and common way to deliver a product or a message to the public and to boost sales.

Use 'reason for' not 'reason of'. Add 'that' after 'is' to introduce the clause. 'Deliver product' needs an article: 'a product'. Use 'or' to join 'product' and 'message'. 'Boost the sales' is unidiomatic; say 'boost sales'. Suggestion: Use 'reason for that', include articles for singular nouns, and parallel structure with 'and to' for purposes.

× Sometimes it can be so annoying.

✓ Sometimes they can be so annoying.

The pronoun reference is to 'advertisements' (plural), so the verb should agree with a plural subject: 'they can' rather than 'it can'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents; replace 'it' with 'they' when referring to 'ads'.

× For example, when I watch YouTube videos, there are at least three or four ads between the videos.

✓ For example, when I watch YouTube videos, there are at least three or four ads during the videos.

'Between the videos' implies separation of videos; ads usually play during videos or between consecutive videos. 'During the videos' is more accurate for mid-roll ads. This is a meaning/word choice adjustment rather than a strict grammatical tense error. Suggestion: Use 'during' to describe ads that play within a single video, and 'between' for ads separating videos.

× Personally I don't prefer any advertisement because it encourage people to consume and likely to spend more on something that they don't need is not necessarily product.

✓ Personally I don't like advertisements because they encourage people to consume and are likely to make them spend more on things they do not need; they are not necessarily useful products.

'Don't prefer' is unnatural here; 'don't like' fits better. 'It encourage' is ungrammatical: 'advertisements' is plural so use 'they encourage'. 'Likely to spend' needs a subject and clearer phrasing: 'are likely to make them spend'. 'Something that they don't need is not necessarily product' is ungrammatical and unclear; split into two clauses: 'things they do not need' and 'not necessarily useful products'. Suggestion: Use plural pronouns and verbs to match 'advertisements', and break long clauses into clearer coordinated clauses.

× I quite often see advertisements on phone rather than computer because I don't really use computers since I graduated from college.

✓ I quite often see advertisements on my phone rather than on a computer because I haven't really used a computer much since I graduated from college.

The original mixes present simple ('don't really use') with a past time marker ('since I graduated'), which requires present perfect ('haven't used') to show an action continuing from the past to present. Also include articles: 'on my phone' and 'on a computer'. Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'since' to link past events to the present and include appropriate articles ('my phone', 'a computer').

× I use my phone on social media daily so I often see advertisement umm on social media like Facebook or Instagram.

✓ I use my phone for social media daily so I often see advertisements on platforms like Facebook or Instagram.

Use 'for social media' rather than 'on social media' after 'use my phone'. 'See advertisement' needs plural 'advertisements'. Repeating 'on social media' is redundant; 'platforms like' clarifies the examples. Also avoid filler words like 'umm' in formal responses. Suggestion: Say 'use my phone for social media' and 'advertisements on platforms like Facebook or Instagram' for clarity.