Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail (where you lived, limited TV exposure) and a brief consequence. Reduce hesitations and avoid redundancy. Use linking words (because/so) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Not really. I grew up in a small village and had little access to television, so I didn't see many commercials. Because of that limited exposure, no particular advertisement left a strong impression on me.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear statement, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'especially' and 'metro stations'). Avoid vague phrases like 'project is big budget' and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on transport, especially in metro trains. This is because metro systems carry many commuters, so companies invest in large campaigns at stations and inside carriages.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion sentence followed by one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words (because/for example). Avoid trailing off and filler words. Provide a concise closing statement to complete the thought.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do like advertisements because they inform me about new products and services I might need. For example, ads helped me learn about a local delivery app that wasn't well known before.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the preferred type, then explain why with a specific reason and an example. Avoid unclear phrases like 'against our environment'—say 'harmful to the environment'—and remove fillers. Keep to two or three sentences max.

Ejemplo: I prefer digital advertising because it reaches people instantly and reduces paper waste. For example, online ads and social media posts can replace paper flyers that often end up as litter.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opening sentence stating frequency, then explain with a specific reason and a brief comparison. Instead of saying 'I don't know why,' offer a plausible explanation (e.g., apps, targeted ads) to show awareness. Keep it concise and coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads frequently on my phone, much more than on my laptop. This is probably because many apps and social media platforms show targeted ads on mobile devices, so they appear more often during daily use.

× I mostly lived in a village and I rarely watch TV umm while in my childhood days so I don't exactly remember any eye catchy advertisements.

✓ I mostly lived in a village and I rarely watched TV while I was a child, so I don't exactly remember any eye-catching advertisements.

Mixed tense use: 'lived' and 'while in my childhood days' refer to the past, so 'watch' should be past 'watched' and the phrase should be 'while I was a child'. Also 'eye catchy' is not correct adjective form; use 'eye-catching'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when describing childhood and use standard compound adjective with a hyphen.

× I see a lot of advertisements in Trains expects, especially in metro trains since the project is big budget.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements on trains, especially on metro trains, since the project has a big budget.

Preposition and noun number: 'in Trains expects' is incorrect. Use 'on trains'. Also 'big budget' needs an article and verb: 'the project has a big budget' or 'is big-budget'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'on' for vehicles and ensure nouns and surrounding words form a grammatical phrase.

× We know so many people do advertisements in metro stations, so I think there are many.

✓ Many people put up advertisements in metro stations, so I think there are many of them.

Awkward pronoun and subject: 'We know so many people do advertisements' is unnatural; use 'Many people put up advertisements'. 'There are many' needs an object 'of them' to clarify what 'many' refers to. Suggestion: state the subject and referent clearly.

× Umm, why I like advertisements.

✓ Umm, why do I like advertisements?

This is a question but lacks auxiliary 'do' and question word inversion. In yes/no and wh- questions in present simple, use 'do' for inversion. Suggestion: form questions as 'Why do I...?'.

× By watching advertisements we could acknowledge and know some companies and services.

✓ By watching advertisements we can learn about some companies and services.

'Could' suggests past ability; here you mean a general present ability, so use 'can'. Also 'acknowledge and know' is awkward; use 'learn about' to express gaining information. Suggestion: use 'can' for general truths and choose concise verbs.

× Maybe we cannot access such information if.

✓ Maybe we cannot access such information otherwise.

The sentence is incomplete ('if' needs a condition). Use 'otherwise' to complete the idea: without advertisements we might not access such information. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and complete conditional thoughts.

× I like digital advertisements mostly.

✓ I mostly like digital advertisements.

Adverb placement: 'mostly' usually precedes the verb or goes before the object. 'I mostly like' is more natural. Suggestion: place adverbs near the verb they modify for clarity.

× Some are against our environment, for example, advertisements by paper notices.

✓ Some are harmful to the environment, for example, paper notices used as advertisements.

'Against our environment' is unnatural; say 'harmful to the environment'. 'Advertisements by paper notices' is awkward; rephrase to 'paper notices used as advertisements'. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions like 'harmful to the environment' and clearer noun phrases.

× It costs umm umm, wastages in public platforms and uh.

✓ They cause waste in public places.

Unclear subject and verb: 'It costs wastages' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'they' for 'paper notices' and 'cause waste' (uncountable). 'Public platforms' likely means 'public places'. Suggestion: use clear subjects and correct nouns (uncountable 'waste').

× I often see most advertisements while using mobile phones.

✓ I often see most advertisements while using my mobile phone.

Number agreement and natural phrasing: use 'my mobile phone' (singular) or 'on mobile phones in general'. Also 'while using mobile phones' is generic; personal experience uses 'my'. Suggestion: match possessive and number to context.

× I don't know why it is so.

✓ I don't know why this is so.

'It' is vague here; 'this' refers back to the fact that ads appear more on phones. Using 'this' is clearer. Suggestion: use demonstrative pronouns to refer to specific preceding ideas.

× I don't know the algorithm of advertisements, but I notice more advertisements in smartphones than laptops.

✓ I don't know the advertising algorithms, but I notice more advertisements on smartphones than on laptops.

Use plural 'algorithms' or 'the algorithm behind advertising'. Prepositions: use 'on' for devices ('on smartphones', 'on laptops'). Also 'in smartphones' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'on' with devices and pluralize or specify 'algorithm' properly.