Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer clearer, more concise and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the advertisement, then give one or two specific reasons why it impressed you. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and keep responses to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I remember an advertisement for Yippee noodles from my childhood. It impressed me because it showed that the noodles were non-sticky, unlike the Maggie noodles we usually ate, and the bright jingle and colourful logo made it memorable. Because I watched TV often, the ad played frequently and stuck in my mind.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and correct minor grammar mistakes. Begin with a direct statement, then give two specific examples of the adverts and explain their impact using linking words like 'for example' and 'so'. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition ('about' used repeatedly).

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many advertisements on Go trains between Brampton and Toronto. For example, there are poster ads for upcoming events and movie releases, which are colourful and eye-catching, so passengers often stop to read them.

Sugerencia: Make the response more fluent and use correct collocations. Start with a clear opinion, then list 1–2 reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Replace incorrect phrases ('have a attract') with 'are attractive' or 'have an attractive'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like advertisements that are attractive and have a catchy jingle and vivid colours because they grab my attention. I also prefer ads that clearly explain a product’s features, as that helps me decide what to buy.

Sugerencia: Organise the answer: give one topic sentence then two supporting points with examples. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'are catchy', 'provide clear information', 'confuse people about the product'). Use linking words like 'also' and 'because' to show relationships.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements that provide clear information about a product because they help me understand what I would get. I also like ads that are colourful and have catchy music, as they are more memorable than dark, confusing ads.

Sugerencia: Start with a concise statement about frequency, then give specific examples and causes. Avoid awkward phrasing ('some persons who have paid the companies')—say 'sponsored content' or 'paid promotions'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads on my phone and computer very often. For example, when I listen to music or watch videos, sponsored ads pop up because companies pay to promote new products, so online advertising has become unavoidable.

× Yes, I really remember an ad advertisement for a brand new noodles called Yippee, which was launched on all TE televisions and which was covering almost all the uh uh channels.

✓ Yes, I really remember an advertisement for a brand-new noodle called Yippee, which was launched on all the TV channels and was covered on almost every channel.

Incorrect or redundant articles and noun forms: 'an ad advertisement' is redundant; use 'an advertisement'. 'brand new noodles' is incorrect article/number: 'noodle' as a product name can be singular or uncountable; here use 'noodle' or 'noodles' without extra article; 'brand-new' requires hyphen. 'TE televisions' is likely 'TV channels'; use the correct term. Also change 'which was covering almost all the channels' to active past 'was covered on almost every channel' for clarity. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct articles and standard terms.

× Uh, because we usually used to eat Maggie, which was a sticky noodles, but the Eevee lodge with the new uh, brand new logo with the non sticky noodles, which left an impact on me and until it came my home.

✓ We usually used to eat Maggi, which was sticky noodles, but Yippee came with a new logo and non-sticky noodles, which left an impression on me until it reached my home.

Misuse of adjectives and noun forms: 'a sticky noodles' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or use 'sticky noodle'. 'brand new logo with the non sticky noodles' is awkward—use 'came with a new logo and non-sticky noodles'. 'left an impact' is a less natural collocation; use 'left an impression'. 'until it came my home' is incorrect word order and preposition; use 'until it reached my home' or 'when it reached my home'. Suggestion: match adjective forms to nouns and use natural collocations.

× I was like literally watching that advertisement every day.

✓ I literally watched that advertisement every day.

Tense inconsistency and informal filler: 'I was like watching' uses progressive past with 'literally' awkwardly; simple past 'I literally watched' fits habitual action in the past. Also remove 'was like' as an informal filler. Suggestion: use simple past for past habitual actions.

× Yes, whenever I travel from Brampton to Toronto, I see a lot of her advertisements on the walls of the Go train.

✓ Yes, whenever I travel from Brampton to Toronto, I see a lot of advertisements on the walls of the GO train.

Incorrect pronoun and preposition: 'her advertisements' is wrong pronoun; use no possessive: 'advertisements'. 'the Go train' capitalization: 'GO'. Keep 'on the walls of the GO train' is acceptable. Suggestion: remove incorrect pronoun and use correct proper noun capitalization.

× Uh, usually those advertisements about are about the events which are about to occur in Toronto or are about the movies which are about to be launched in the upcoming time.

✓ Usually those advertisements are about events that are going to occur in Toronto or about movies that are going to be released soon.

Redundant and awkward sentence structure: repeated 'about' and 'which are about' makes sentence clumsy. Replace with concise relative clauses 'that are going to occur' and 'that are going to be released soon'. 'launched in the upcoming time' is unnatural; use 'released soon'. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy and use concise verb phrases.

× So these advertisement at the posters are really colourful and are really interactive.

✓ So these advertisements and posters are really colourful and very eye-catching.

Article and noun-number errors: 'advertisement at the posters' is incorrect. Use plural 'advertisements and posters' or 'advertisements on the posters'. 'really interactive' can be better expressed as 'very eye-catching' in this context. Suggestion: correct noun forms and choose natural adjectives.

× So people usually stop and read about the posters.

✓ So people usually stop and read the posters.

Unnecessary preposition: 'read about the posters' implies reading information about them elsewhere; the intended meaning is 'read the posters'. No subject-verb issue but choose more natural verb-complement. Suggestion: remove 'about' to match common collocation.

× Yes, I do like advertisements which have a attract, A catchy Jingle and vivid colours.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements that have an attractive, catchy jingle and vivid colours.

Incorrect verb and adjective forms: 'have a attract' is wrong; use 'have an attractive' (adjective) or 'that attract'. Capitalization errors: 'Jingle' should be lowercase. Use 'that' instead of 'which' for defining clause. Suggestion: use correct adjective form and articles.

× I also like advertisements which provide a lot of knowledge about the products which makes us easy to choose a product to from the market.

✓ I also like advertisements that provide a lot of information about the products, which makes it easier for us to choose a product from the market.

Pronoun and noun choice errors: 'knowledge about the products' is better as 'information about the products'. Relative clause agreement: 'which makes us easy to choose' is ungrammatical; use 'which makes it easier for us to choose'. Remove extraneous 'to'. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns and correct relative clause construction.

× I mostly love the advertisements which uh, provide the clear information about the products.

✓ I mostly like advertisements that provide clear information about the products.

Tense and article issues: 'love' is acceptable but 'like' is more natural here; 'the clear information' should be 'clear information' without 'the'. Use 'that' for defining clauses. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and use consistent verb choice.

× Also, I like the advertisements which are a catchy, have a nice sound on music and which have a lot of colours rather than the black and dark advertisements which uh, confuse about the the product that we are about to buy.

✓ Also, I like advertisements that are catchy, have pleasant music, and use a lot of colours rather than dark advertisements that confuse people about the product they are going to buy.

Article and phrasing errors: 'are a catchy' is wrong—'are catchy'. 'have a nice sound on music' is awkward; use 'have pleasant music'. Remove duplicate 'the the'. 'confuse about the product' needs object: 'confuse people about the product'. 'we are about to buy' -> 'they are going to buy' or 'we are going to buy'. Suggestion: fix adjective forms, verb objects and remove duplicate words.

× Nowadays advertisements on the phone have become really common because whenever we try to listen music, there are a lot of ads which pop up in the middle.

✓ Nowadays advertisements on phones have become really common because whenever we try to listen to music, a lot of ads pop up in the middle.

Preposition and number: 'listen music' needs 'listen to music'. 'on the phone' -> 'on phones' general statement. 'there are a lot of ads which pop up' can be simplified to 'a lot of ads pop up'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and make general nouns plural when speaking generally.

× They are usually about the products being launched or some persons who have paid the companies to promote their advertisements.

✓ They are usually about products being launched or about people who have paid companies to promote their products.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'some persons' is unnatural; use 'people'. 'paid the companies' -> 'paid companies'. 'promote their advertisements' is awkward; promote their products or promote advertisements for them. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct prepositions.

× So I see lot of advertisements nowadays on my phone or rather using my computer for any work.

✓ So I see a lot of advertisements nowadays on my phone or when I use my computer for work.

Missing article with quantifier: 'see lot of' needs 'a lot of'. 'or rather using my computer for any work' is awkward—use 'or when I use my computer for work'. Suggestion: include articles with quantifiers and improve clause structure.