Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to show reason. Correct tense and pronoun errors and remove filler phrases.

Ejemplo: One memorable childhood advertisement for me was a Coca-Cola commercial. In the ad, a little girl struggles with a vending machine and finally gets several bottles, which made it charming and relatable. Because I had similar experiences wanting treats as a child, the advert left a lasting impression on me.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct statement, avoid repeated phrases, and give one clear reason with a linking word. Use specific examples of ad types and correct word choice (e.g., 'vulnerable to ads' instead of 'targets for the social media publicity').

Ejemplo: Yes, there are far more advertisements on public transport now than in the past. For example, trains and buses often display posters and digital screens, which influence commuters because they see the ads repeatedly during their journeys.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then a concise reason with linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition; correct grammar (e.g., 'you get annoyed', 'appear too frequently').

Ejemplo: I like advertisements to some extent because they can inform me about useful products, but they become irritating when they interrupt a show or appear too often during a commute.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid unclear or incorrect words (phrases like 'product move' or 'bomb' are confusing). Start with a topic sentence and then give concrete examples and reasons. Use accurate vocabulary such as 'demonstrates the product', 'useful to many people', and 'celebrity endorsements' sparingly as a reason.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements that clearly demonstrate how a product works because they help me judge its usefulness. For instance, a short demo of a kitchen gadget or an honest review by a trusted celebrity makes me more likely to consider buying it.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and fluency (e.g., 'I see them all the time, especially on Instagram. I find pop-up ads annoying because they distract me and sometimes lead to fraudulent sites').

Ejemplo: Yes, I see advertisements constantly on my phone, especially on Instagram. I find pop-up ads annoying because they interrupt what I'm doing and sometimes link to suspicious or fraudulent websites.

× It is of the beverage Coca-Cola, and it used to be that a small girl is trying to press on the vending machine and eventually she gets a lot of those bottles.

✓ It was an advertisement for the beverage Coca-Cola, and it showed a little girl trying to press the vending machine, and eventually she got a lot of bottles.

The original sentence mixes tenses and uses 'is of' awkwardly. Use 'was' and 'showed' because the student refers to a past advertisement. 'There is/are' constructions are unnecessary; replace with a clear past narrative. Also change 'is trying' to past progressive 'trying' paired with past context and 'gets' to past 'got' to maintain consistent past tense. Grammar problem type ID: 3

× It has. It has had a lasting impression on me because I could always relate to that little girl who was wanting the Coke bottle.

✓ It has had a lasting impression on me because I could always relate to that little girl who wanted the Coke bottle.

The repetition 'It has. It has had' is awkward; keep 'It has had' to indicate a lasting effect up to now. 'Was wanting' is incorrect in this context; simple past 'wanted' is more natural when describing the girl's desire in the ad. Maintain tense consistency between the lasting impression (present perfect) and the past action in the ad (simple past). Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I believe earlier they weren't as much as they are now because I believe that people are impressionable a lot these days.

✓ I believe there weren't as many earlier as there are now because people are much more impressionable these days.

'They weren't as much' is ambiguous and ungrammatical; use 'there weren't as many' to refer to advertisements. 'Impressionable a lot' is awkward; replace with 'much more impressionable' for correct adverb placement and comparative meaning. Also remove the repeated 'I believe' to avoid redundancy. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× We often buy what we see, especially on trains and buses.

✓ We often buy what we see, especially on trains and buses.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed. (No applicable error from the provided list.) Grammar problem type ID: 26

× People are commuting.

✓ People commute.

'Are commuting' suggests a current ongoing action; as a general statement, use the simple present 'commute.' This corrects inappropriate use of progressive aspect for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× They are easy targets for the social media publicity.

✓ They are easy targets for social media publicity.

The article 'the' before 'social media publicity' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing it makes the noun phrase more natural. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I would say I like them up to a certain extent, although getting ads in between your series or just the commute too frequently becomes annoying.

✓ I would say I like them to a certain extent, although receiving ads in the middle of a series or during a commute too frequently becomes annoying.

Use 'to a certain extent' (fixed expression) instead of 'up to.' 'Getting ads' is informal and vague; 'receiving ads' is clearer. 'In between your series' should be 'in the middle of a series' and 'just the commute' should be 'during a commute.' These phrasing changes correct preposition and noun choices and improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× You start, you rather start seeing the product frequently everywhere and then it becomes, uh, you gets annoyed.

✓ You start seeing the product everywhere, and then you get annoyed.

Remove redundant 'you rather start' and awkward hesitation. Use 'you get annoyed' (subject 'you' + verb 'get') — original had 'you gets' which mismatched subject-verb agreement. Simplify the sentence for clarity and correct agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Advertisements that are showcasing the genuine product, for example the product move or a bomb that is actually useful to a large number of population and celebrities recommending those kind of products is actually nice.

✓ I like advertisements that showcase genuine products, for example a product that is actually useful to a large number of people; celebrity endorsements for those kinds of products are nice.

'Showcasing' is a present participle; better to use 'that showcase' for relative clause. 'Product move or a bomb' seems to be incorrect word choice; interpret as 'a useful product.' Use 'a large number of people' not 'population.' 'Those kind of products is' has number agreement errors: 'those kinds of products are.' Recast sentence to fix adjective/adverb use, noun choices, and subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× All the time, especially when I am using Instagram, there are a number of pop up ads which I find annoying because it is.

✓ All the time, especially when I use Instagram, there are a number of pop-up ads which I find annoying because they are intrusive.

'When I am using' can be simplified to 'when I use' for habitual action. 'Pop up' should be hyphenated 'pop-up' as a compound adjective. The clause 'because it is' is incomplete and unclear; replace with 'because they are intrusive' to specify why the ads are annoying and to match plural 'ads.' Grammar problem type ID: 3

× It easily distracts the user from the original topic and it takes you to some maybe fraud sites.

✓ They easily distract users from the original content and may take you to fraudulent sites.

Change 'It' to 'They' to match plural 'ads.' 'The user' is better as 'users' for general statements. 'Original topic' is better phrased as 'original content.' 'Some maybe fraud sites' is ungrammatical; use 'may take you to fraudulent sites' to express possibility and correct adjective use. Grammar problem type ID: 13