Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Улучшите точность и плавность речи: исправьте лексические ошибки (например, «short skin» → «short scene», «buy 1 for me» → «buy one for me») и избегайте тавтологии. Сделайте одно-два предложения с конкретными деталями (что именно вам понравилось в кукольном домике, какие эмоции вы испытывали) и используйте связки («because», «so», «for example»).

Ejemplo: I remember a short scene in the commercial that showed the doll playing in a detailed dollhouse, which caught my attention because of the vivid colors and cheerful music. For example, the bright pink rooms and playful soundtrack made me feel excited, so I begged my parents to buy one for me.

Sugerencia: Сократите и упорядочьте ответ; исправьте непонятные фразы («averting the company of the train...») и используйте связки. Дайте одно чёткое утверждение и одно конкретное объяснение или пример. Это сделает речь более естественной и логичной.

Ejemplo: No, advertising on public transport is banned in my country because authorities think it distracts passengers and promotes unhealthy consumption. For example, there are no posters or video ads inside trains or buses, so commuters see far fewer ads than in other countries.

Sugerencia: Улучшите грамматику и ясность: исправьте ошибки типа «the perfumes» → «perfumes», «a recent perfumer to convince me» → «a recent perfume ad convinced me», «don't appeal me» → «don't appeal to me». Дайте конкретный пример и причину предпочтения, используйте связки («because», «for example»).

Ejemplo: It depends. I like watching ads for cosmetics and perfumes because they show how products smell or look, which helps me decide. For example, a recent perfume ad convinced me to try a new scent because it showed real people enjoying it; however, toy ads don't appeal to me because I'm not their target audience.

Sugerencia: Избегайте повторов и формулируйте мысли точнее: «where I really need» неясно — скажите «what I need». Исправьте имя бренда и грамматику. Дайте связное объяснение, одно предложение с причиной и одно с примером.

Ejemplo: I prefer ads for cosmetics and perfumes because they show product benefits and help me choose what I need. For instance, a recent perfume ad convinced me to try a new scent by showing how it lasted all day, and I was pleased with the result.

Sugerencia: Упростите и исправьте структуру: избегайте лишних слов и грамматических ошибок («serials» → «TV series», «necessary once appears» неясно). Сформулируйте одно предложение с мнением и одно с конкретным примером о частоте и влиянии рекламы на ваше время.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer, and they are annoying when I want to watch TV series or films. For example, I often have to wait through 30-second video ads before a show, which wastes my time and interrupts my viewing.

× I particularly remember a short skin where the doll was shown in a beautiful dollhouse, which made the whole ad look enhancing.

✓ I particularly remember a short scene where the doll was shown in a beautiful dollhouse, which made the whole ad look enhanced.

The word 'skin' is incorrect and should be 'scene' (wrong word choice). 'Enhancing' is a present participle describing an ongoing action; the correct past participle 'enhanced' describes the resulting appearance. Use 'enhanced' to indicate the ad appeared improved as a result of the scene. Suggestion: use 'scene' for a short film segment and 'enhanced' to describe the ad's appearance.

× So I begged my parents to buy 1 for me.

✓ So I begged my parents to buy one for me.

Using the digit '1' in running prose is inappropriate; spell out numbers up to ten in formal speech/writing. This is a stylistic correction rather than grammatical, but it addresses number representation in sentences. Suggestion: write 'one' in words in speech transcripts.

× Actually, in my country, advertising on public transport is banned because the authorities believe it can have a negative effect by distracting people or encouraging unhealthy consumption.

✓ Actually, in my country advertising on public transport is banned because the authorities believe it can have a negative effect by distracting people or encouraging unhealthy consumption.

The original is mostly correct grammatically, but removing the comma after 'country' produces a smoother sentence flow in spoken English. This is a minor style/structure adjustment. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary commas that interrupt natural speech rhythm.

× However averting the company of the train or some public and other transport.

✓ However, this rule also applies to advertising on train companies and other forms of public transport.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and lacks a clear subject and verb. It seems to attempt to say the ban covers train companies and other public transport. The corrected sentence supplies a subject ('this rule'), a verb ('applies to'), and clarifies the objects. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb and express the intended relationship explicitly.

× I really enjoy watching advertisements for cosmetics and the perfumes because they help me to decide what to buy.

✓ I really enjoy watching advertisements for cosmetics and perfumes because they help me decide what to buy.

The definite article 'the' before 'perfumes' is unnecessary and unnatural when speaking generally. Also 'help me to decide' is acceptable but 'help me decide' is more natural. Suggestion: omit 'the' when speaking about categories generally and prefer the shorter infinitive form 'help me decide'.

× For example, a recent perfumer to convince me, like persuade me to try a new scent.

✓ For example, a recent perfume advertisement convinced me and persuaded me to try a new scent.

The original has incorrect word choice ('perfumer' instead of 'perfume advertisement') and a fragmentary structure. It lacks a proper verb form and connector. The correction provides a clear subject and verbs in past tense to match 'recent'. Suggestion: use 'perfume advertisement' for clarity and include complete verb phrases.

× On the other hand, I'm not really interested in advertisement for toys because they don't appeal me.

✓ On the other hand, I'm not really interested in advertisements for toys because they don't appeal to me.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. The verb 'appeal' requires the preposition 'to' when used in this sense ('appeal to me'). Suggestion: use plural when referring to ads in general and include 'to' after 'appeal'.

× As I said before, I would prefer to watch advertisements of cosmetics and perfumes because they really helped me to decide where I really need and what I really want to buy.

✓ As I said before, I would prefer to watch advertisements for cosmetics and perfumes because they really helped me decide what I need and what I want to buy.

Use 'advertisements for' rather than 'of'. Also the phrase 'decide where I really need' is incorrect; 'what I need' is correct. Remove the redundant 'really' and prefer parallel structure 'what I need and what I want'. Suggestion: use 'for' with 'advertisements', keep parallel objects, and avoid redundancy.

× For instance, recent Perfumite actually convinced me to try a new scent and I really like it, so I'm so thankful for the company which advertised.

✓ For instance, a recent advertisement actually convinced me to try a new scent and I really like it, so I'm thankful to the company that advertised it.

'Perfumite' appears to be a mistaken product name; use 'a recent advertisement' for clarity. Use 'thankful to' rather than 'thankful for' with a company, and use 'that advertised it' or 'which advertised it' — 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses. Remove redundant 'so'. Suggestion: clarify references, use 'thankful to' for people/companies, and prefer 'that' in defining relative clauses.

× Yes, and that's so annoying every single time when I want to watch some serials or even films online.

✓ Yes, and that's so annoying every single time I want to watch serials or films online.

The original uses 'when I want to watch' which is acceptable, but removing 'when' makes the clause more natural and concise in spoken English. 'Some serials' is better as just 'serials' or 'TV series'. Suggestion: prefer concise phrasing in spoken answers and use 'TV series' instead of 'serials' if desired.

× These advertisements I would say are necessary once appears on my phone and I waste so much time just watching these videos.

✓ These advertisements, I would say, are unnecessary; once they appear on my phone I waste a lot of time just watching these videos.

The original contains multiple errors: it calls ads 'necessary' contrary to context (likely 'unnecessary'), lacks agreement ('appears' should be 'they appear'), and has awkward structure. The correction fixes agreement, meaning, and flow. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('they appear') and check that word choice ('unnecessary' vs 'necessary') matches context.