Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误，且内容不够具体。建议回答时先明确主题句，然后用具体细节支持，避免重复和语法错误。

Ejemplo: Yes, there was an advertisement about health supplements that impressed me as a child. It featured an old woman dancing happily, and the catchy song made it memorable.

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，内容较为笼统。建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达观点，并用具体例子支持。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and airplanes, especially when I book cheaper tickets. These ads are everywhere, so passengers have to look at them during the journey.

Sugerencia: 表达较为清楚，但有语法和重复问题。建议简洁表达观点，并用具体原因支持，同时避免重复。

Ejemplo: Actually, I don't like advertisements because they often pop up when I'm searching for important work information, which wastes my time.

Sugerencia: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，缺乏逻辑。建议先明确回答是否喜欢广告，再具体说明喜欢的类型，并用简单明了的语言表达。

Ejemplo: I usually don't like advertisements, but I enjoy those that come with free gifts, like a fan you can hold and wave.

Sugerencia: 回答内容较完整，但语法和表达有待改进。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，表达更自然流畅。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone because I use free apps that require me to watch ads to access their features.

× And yes, and it is an advertisement about health supplements and the song is such a ear worn and this in the video is about, uh, old woman and old when they dance together and when they dance.

✓ And yes, it is an advertisement about health supplements, and the song is such an earworm. The video is about an old woman and an old man dancing together.

这里“ear worn”应为“earworm”，表示“洗脑的歌曲”；“a ear”应为“an ear”，因为ear以元音音素开头；“old woman and old when”应为“an old woman and an old man”，缺少冠词且“when”应为“man”。需要使用正确的形容词和冠词形式。

× Yes, especially on some on trains and or airplanes which is which you order at a cheaper price.

✓ Yes, especially on some trains and airplanes which you can book at a cheaper price.

“some on trains”中“on”多余，应去掉；“which is which you order”结构不正确，应改为“which you can book”；“airplanes”复数形式正确。需要注意单复数和句子结构。

× And there are so many advertising on the on this transport and you have to look through them.

✓ And there is so much advertising on this transport, and you have to look through it.

“advertising”是不可数名词，不能用“many”，应使用“much”；“on the on this transport”重复，应去掉“the”；“them”指代复数，改为“it”指代不可数名词。

× Actually I don't like advertisement because it's always popped at some important times, just like I need to search some information for my, uh, work.

✓ Actually, I don't like advertisements because they always pop up at important times, like when I need to search for some information for my work.

“advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”；“it's always popped”时态和语态错误，应为主动语态“they always pop up”；“at some important times”改为“at important times”更自然。

× But the advertisement is appeared and it's take me some time to look to look through.

✓ But the advertisement appears and it takes me some time to look through it.

“is appeared”错误，appear为不及物动词，不用被动语态，应为“appears”；“it's take”应为“it takes”；“look to look through”重复，应去掉一个“look”。

× I don't actually, I don't like any kinds of advertising, but for one kind, we expect one kind and advertising is making to a fan and you can take it in your hand and do swing the wings.

✓ Actually, I don't like any kind of advertising, but there is one kind that makes a fan you can hold in your hand and swing the wings.

“any kinds”应为“any kind”；“we expect one kind and advertising is making to a fan”语法混乱，改为“there is one kind that makes a fan”；“do swing the wings”应为“swing the wings”。

× Yes, I often see them because I don't want to pay fee for some appli for some apps, so I need to watch some advertisements to to get the to have access to the apps I need to do.

✓ Yes, I often see them because I don't want to pay fees for some apps, so I need to watch some advertisements to have access to the apps I need.

“pay fee for some appli for some apps”重复且错误，应为“pay fees for some apps”；“to to get the to have access”重复且冗余，应简化为“to have access”；“apps I need to do”不完整，去掉“to do”。