Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子并注意时态和主谓一致，同时增加细节描述使内容更具体。

Ejemplo: Yes, I remember a healthy protein food advertisement from my childhood. It featured cartoon elderly people dancing and singing, which made it very memorable and fun to watch.

Sugerencia: 表达不够流畅，语法错误较多，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and other transport. I think companies choose this method to promote their products, but sometimes it frustrates me because there are too many ads.

Sugerencia: 句子结构混乱，词汇使用不当，建议简化表达，避免重复，并注意时态和词汇搭配。

Ejemplo: To be honest, I don't like advertisements very much. They often appear when I am watching videos I enjoy, which interrupts me and makes me feel frustrated.

Sugerencia: 表达较为清晰，但语法和用词有待改进，建议使用更准确的句型和词汇，并增加连接词使表达更流畅。

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements that have an appealing storyline and introduce products naturally, instead of just repeating the same sentence over and over.

Sugerencia: 语法错误较多，表达不够自然，建议注意时态一致性和词汇搭配，简化句子结构。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone. They always pop up, and sometimes I feel very frustrated because I don't know how to close them.

× I still vividly remember there is a protein healthy food advertisement that's very interesting and it's too cartoon elders dancing and singing.

✓ I still vividly remember there was a protein healthy food advertisement that was very interesting and it had cartoon elders dancing and singing.

这里的时间是过去时态，描述的是过去的记忆，所以“there is”应改为过去时“there was”。另外，描述广告内容时也应使用过去时态。

× it's too cartoon elders dancing and singing.

✓ it had cartoon elders dancing and singing.

“too cartoon elders”表达不正确，应使用“had cartoon elders”来描述广告中有卡通老人跳舞和唱歌。

× lots of time I think maybe they will choose the way to make other people know the products.

✓ lots of times I think maybe they will choose ways to let other people know the products.

“lots of time”应为复数形式“lots of times”，表示多次。

× But sometimes I think it's makes me frustrated because too much.

✓ But sometimes I think it makes me frustrated because there are too many.

“it's makes”中“it's”与“makes”冲突，应去掉“'s”。“because too much”表达不完整，应补充“there are too many”来说明广告太多。

× I most of the time I meet the advertisement when I was enjoying a videos I like and it disturbed the bird, disrupted me that makes me upset and frustrated.

✓ Most of the time I see advertisements when I am enjoying videos I like, and they disturb me, which makes me upset and frustrated.

“I most of the time I meet the advertisement”结构混乱，应改为“Most of the time I see advertisements”。“disturbed the bird”应为“disturb me”，且“that makes me upset”应改为“which makes me upset”。

× I prefer the advertising contains a very appealing storyline and it can introduce their products naturally rather than completely repeat a same sentence.

✓ I prefer advertisements that contain a very appealing storyline and can introduce their products naturally rather than completely repeating the same sentence.

“advertising contains”应改为复数“advertisements that contain”。“a same sentence”应为“the same sentence”。“repeat”应改为动名词“repeating”。

× the advertisements always popped up and sometimes I can't find my ways to use them as a very frustrated.

✓ the advertisements always pop up and sometimes I can't find ways to use my phone, which is very frustrating.

“popped up”应为一般现在时“pop up”，因为描述习惯动作。 “can't find my ways to use them as a very frustrated”表达不清，应改为“can't find ways to use my phone, which is very frustrating”。