Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I vividly remember a Dove chocolate commercial from my childhood. It featured a famous actress and had a romantic theme, which made it very memorable for me.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating similar words unnecessarily.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and other forms of transport. They appear on walls or as videos, covering a wide range of topics.

Sugerencia: Good attempt to explain your opinion with examples. To improve, use more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer flow better.

Ejemplo: It depends on the advertisement's content. For instance, I enjoy Thai advertisements because they often have unexpected endings and humorous content, making them feel like captivating stories.

Sugerencia: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Clarify your points and avoid vague terms. Also, provide a clear example to support your preference.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements that are creative and tell a compelling story. For example, commercials featuring humorous stories or memorable characters usually catch my attention more than simple product ads.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your feelings clearly and use linking words to organise your ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer. Whenever I open an app, there is usually an ad, which can be very annoying and sometimes redirects me to other apps. I really dislike this.

× There is there was a famous actress in it and which is really romantic.

✓ There was a famous actress in it, which was really romantic.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'There is' and 'there was' consecutively, which is redundant and confusing. Since the context refers to a past event, 'There was' is appropriate. Also, 'which is really romantic' should be 'which was really romantic' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I've seen a lot of advertisements on trains or other transportation transportations.

✓ I've seen a lot of advertisements on trains or other transportation.

The word 'transportations' is incorrect because 'transportation' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'transportations' is a pluralization error.

× Sometimes they are video playing, they are covered all sorts of topics.

✓ Sometimes they are videos playing; they cover all sorts of topics.

The phrase 'video playing' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'videos playing' to indicate plural noun, and 'they are covered' should be 'they cover' to correctly describe the action. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× I particularly like Thailand advertisements because they offer some unexpected outcomes and hilarious contents.

✓ I particularly like Thai advertisements because they offer some unexpected outcomes and hilarious content.

'Thailand advertisements' should be 'Thai advertisements' to use the correct adjective form. Also, 'contents' is usually uncountable when referring to the substance of advertisements, so 'content' is correct.

× I prefer advertisement that is creative and tells a compelling story.

✓ I prefer advertisements that are creative and tell a compelling story.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the plural verb 'tell' and the general statement. Also, 'that is' should be 'that are' to agree with the plural subject.

× For example, commercials that use boomers or hilarious stories tend to catch my attention more just a simple product.

✓ For example, commercials that use humor or hilarious stories tend to catch my attention more than just a simple product.

The word 'boomers' is likely a mistake; possibly 'humor' or 'jokes' was intended. Also, the phrase 'more just a simple product' is incomplete and should be 'more than just a simple product' to make a proper comparison.

× Yes, there are so many advertisements on my phone and computer, which really allows me whenever I want to open a app, there's always some advertisement on it and then it will turn to another apps.

✓ Yes, there are so many advertisements on my phone and computer, which really annoys me. Whenever I want to open an app, there's always some advertisement on it, and then it will switch to another app.

The phrase 'which really allows me' is incorrect; 'annoys me' fits the context better. 'a app' should be 'an app' because 'app' starts with a vowel sound. 'turn to another apps' is incorrect; it should be 'switch to another app' to maintain singular form and correct verb usage.

× I really, it's really upset me. I really hate them.

✓ I am really upset by them. I really hate them.

The phrase 'it's really upset me' is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'I am really upset by them' to express the feeling properly. The adverb 'really' is correctly placed before 'hate' in the second sentence.