Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was for Dairy Milk chocolate. The commercial showed people enjoying the chocolate and how it made them happy, which made me want to try it. After seeing the ad, I started eating Dairy Milk regularly.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples using linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, clarify your opinions and avoid vague statements.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and other transport. For example, they promote beverages like energy drinks that are popular among young people. However, some ads show peaceful scenes that might confuse children, which I think is not always appropriate.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. To improve, express your opinion clearly with a topic sentence, then explain your reasons with specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like most advertisements because they often lack clear messages. For instance, the Red Bull ad shows a cartoon and suggests feeling peaceful after drinking, but I find it confusing and hard to understand its purpose.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details and reasons using linking words. Also, be careful with word choice and sentence structure to make your answer more natural and effective.

Ejemplo: I like advertisements that focus on nature and promote environmental protection because they raise awareness about the ecosystem. Additionally, I prefer ads with peaceful atmospheres that create a positive impression, especially for children, by avoiding inappropriate content.

× Yes, of course there are a lot of advertisement which I am really impressed from especially for our toys and our chocolates in this day show how people eat, eat how the peoples attract towards it after eating it.

✓ Yes, of course there are a lot of advertisements which I am really impressed by, especially for our toys and our chocolates. These days, they show how people eat and how people are attracted to them after eating.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to many ads. 'Impressed from' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'impressed by'. 'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is already plural. The sentence was also run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× I have started to eat it after see the advertisement in a television.

✓ I started to eat it after seeing the advertisement on television.

The verb tense should be simple past 'started' to match the completed action. 'After see' is incorrect; it should be 'after seeing' (gerund form). Also, 'in a television' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on television'.

× Yes, of course I have seen a lot of advertisement whenever I visited anywhere by train or any other transport.

✓ Yes, of course I have seen a lot of advertisements whenever I visited anywhere by train or any other transport.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads.

× In this way they are sometimes advertised the beverages like change which is mainly consumed by a young man or sometime woman's.

✓ In this way, they sometimes advertise beverages like 'Change', which are mainly consumed by young men or sometimes women.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun and verb usage. 'They are sometimes advertised' is passive and awkward; active voice 'they sometimes advertise' is better. 'A young man' should be plural 'young men' to match 'beverages'. 'Woman's' is possessive and incorrect; it should be plural 'women'.

× Also in this way they show a peacefulness so it's given a bad impression especially on children.

✓ Also, in this way, they show peacefulness, so it gives a bad impression, especially on children.

'It's given' is incorrect; the subject 'it' should be followed by the active verb 'gives' to match the present tense. 'Peacefulness' does not need 'a' before it as it is an uncountable noun here.

× Sometimes they show availability which I really dislike in or sometime they show such type of ads which have no meanings or the objective is not not to be clear.

✓ Sometimes they show availability, which I really dislike, or sometimes they show ads that have no meaning or whose objective is not clear.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' for frequency. 'Such type of ads' is redundant; 'ads that' is better. 'No meanings' should be 'no meaning' as 'meaning' is uncountable here. 'Not not to be clear' is incorrect; it should be 'not clear'.

× So I avoid it. That we can take an example of Red Bull in this way that shows just a cartoon.

✓ So I avoid it. For example, Red Bull shows just a cartoon in its ads.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'That we can take an example of' is incorrect structure; 'For example' is better. The sentence needed rephrasing for clarity.

× So feel a peacefulness after drinking.

✓ It makes me feel peacefulness after drinking.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'It makes me' clarifies who feels peacefulness. Also, 'peacefulness' is uncountable and does not need 'a'.

× So I'm not able to understand the meaning of it.

✓ So I'm not able to understand its meaning.

'The meaning of it' is better expressed as 'its meaning' for conciseness and naturalness.

× Well, I like such type of advertisement in this day reflecting the nature also so that it contribute towards the ecosystem also and moreover I like a peaceful atmospheres where the where it given a good impression especially on children's by avoiding some vulgarity.

✓ Well, I like this type of advertisement nowadays that reflects nature, so it contributes towards the ecosystem. Moreover, I like peaceful atmospheres where it gives a good impression, especially on children, by avoiding vulgarity.

'Such type of advertisement' should be 'this type of advertisement'. 'In this day' is better as 'nowadays'. 'It contribute' should be 'it contributes' (third person singular). 'Peaceful atmospheres' is plural, so 'a peaceful atmospheres' is incorrect; remove 'a'. 'Where the where it given' is incorrect; should be 'where it gives'. 'Children's' is possessive and incorrect here; should be plural 'children'.