Computers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en évitant les répétitions et en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide. Par exemple, au lieu de dire "to send and or write a report", vous pouvez dire "to write and send reports". Aussi, utilisez des connecteurs comme "for example" ou "in addition" pour mieux structurer votre réponse.

Ejemplo: I usually use a computer when I'm studying because I need to do a lot of research. In addition, I use it to write and send reports to my teachers. For example, when preparing presentations, the computer helps me organize my ideas effectively.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse est correcte mais il y a des erreurs grammaticales et un manque de précision. Par exemple, utilisez le passé correctement ("used" au lieu de "use") et précisez les tâches. Utilisez aussi des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

Ejemplo: The first time I used a computer was when I was 13 years old. It was a large, old computer without Internet access. Therefore, I mainly used it for simple tasks such as writing documents and playing games.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse manque de clarté et contient des phrases incomplètes ou confuses. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire suivie d'exemples précis. Évitez les phrases inachevées et utilisez des connecteurs pour la fluidité.

Ejemplo: I think my life would be completely different without a computer because I spend a lot of time on screens. For example, I use it to check my emails and messages on social media. Without it, I would have to find other ways to communicate and entertain myself.

Sugerencia: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais la structure grammaticale peut être améliorée. Par exemple, utilisez "It would be difficult for me to use a computer when..." et évitez les répétitions. Ajoutez des connecteurs pour mieux organiser vos idées.

Ejemplo: It would be difficult for me to use a computer when I travel abroad because I prefer not to spend too much time on screens. Instead, I want to enjoy the moment by visiting museums and engaging in various activities.

× I usually use a computer when I'm studying because I need to do a lot of research and to send and or write a report to my teachers.

✓ I usually use a computer when I'm studying because I need to do a lot of research and send or write a report to my teachers.

The phrase 'to send and or write' is incorrect because after 'need to do a lot of research and', the verbs should be parallel and consistent. Using 'to send and or write' is awkward; it should be 'send or write' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form.

× Beside, I also need a computer when I'm doing a presentation.

✓ Besides, I also need a computer when I'm doing a presentation.

The word 'Beside' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'Besides' to mean 'in addition'. 'Beside' means 'next to' and is a preposition, not suitable in this context.

× So I mainly use it for simple task like writing document or playing games.

✓ So I mainly use it for simple tasks like writing documents or playing games.

The noun 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because 'simple' implies more than one, and 'document' should be plural 'documents' to match the plural 'tasks'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× So I mainly use it for simple task like writing document or playing games.

✓ So I mainly use it for simple tasks like writing documents or playing games.

The noun 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because 'simple' implies more than one, and 'document' should be plural 'documents' to match the plural 'tasks'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× So I mainly use it for simple task like writing document or playing games.

✓ So I mainly use it for simple tasks like writing documents or playing games.

The noun 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because 'simple' implies more than one, and 'document' should be plural 'documents' to match the plural 'tasks'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I think my life will be completely different if I didn't have a computer because I pass a lot of time on screen.

✓ I think my life will be completely different if I didn't have a computer because I spend a lot of time on screen.

The verb 'pass' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'spend' when referring to time. Also, 'didn't have' is correct for the conditional past tense, but 'pass' should be in present tense 'spend' to match the habitual action.

× I check my e-mail, my messages on social media like including and to different artwork.

✓ I check my e-mail, my messages on social media, including different artwork.

The phrase 'like including and to different artwork' is incorrect and unclear. 'Including' should be used to introduce examples without 'like' or 'and to'. The corrected sentence removes unnecessary words for clarity.

× The conditions would be difficult for me to use a computer is when I travel abroad, because I think that I don't want to be on screen.

✓ The condition that would make it difficult for me to use a computer is when I travel abroad, because I think I don't want to be on screen.

The original sentence has a subject-verb agreement and sentence structure issue. 'Conditions would be difficult for me to use a computer' is awkward. It should be 'The condition that would make it difficult for me to use a computer is...'. Also, 'I think that I don't want' is better as 'I think I don't want' for natural flow.