Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more organized and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear references and repetition (e.g. “Tony”, “they”) and correct basic grammar (use past/simple present consistently). Use linking words like “because” or “since” to show reasons.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I have loved drawing since childhood because my mother was an artist and encouraged me. For example, she taught me basic techniques and we used to draw together every weekend, which helped me improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary (“gallery”, not “garden”). Give one clear reason and a specific brief example. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” and avoid filler words and long pauses.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries, but I prefer visiting with friends because I like sharing opinions about the artworks. For example, I usually go with my friend John, and we discuss our favourite paintings while having coffee afterwards.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer (Yes/No) then state a specific area you want to learn and why. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. “modern art”, “classical art”) and avoid vague phrases. Provide one short example of what you want to learn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more, especially about modern and classical art because I want to understand different styles and techniques. For instance, I would like to study impressionist brushwork and modern abstract composition to improve my own drawings.

Sugerencia: Be consistent and precise. If you say you didn’t have formal lessons, explain how you learned instead with one or two concrete details. Use linking words like “but” or “however” to contrast and remove repetition. Correct basic grammar (e.g. “I learned from my mother” not “I took after”).

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t take formal lessons as a child, but I learned a lot at home from my mother. For example, we spent weekends drawing together and my family displayed many of my early paintings at home, which encouraged me to practice more.

× Tony has always been a part of my life and they play an important role in my life.

✓ Tony has always been a part of my life and he plays an important role in my life.

The pronoun 'they' is plural or gender-neutral; here it refers to a singular person 'Tony', so the correct third-person singular pronoun is 'he'. Use consistent singular pronouns to match singular nouns. ID:12

× So I, I can't say actually, I'm good at drawing since my childhood.

✓ So I can't really say I've been good at drawing since my childhood.

The sentence mixes present tense with a time expression 'since my childhood'. Use present perfect ('have been') to link past-starting time to present. Also 'actually' is better as 'really' for naturalness. ID:2

× It's my skills I take after for my mom and that's so that's why I love drawing a lot.

✓ These are skills I took after my mom for, and that's why I love drawing a lot.

The phrase 'take after' is used incorrectly with 'for'. Use 'take after' meaning 'resemble' without 'for', and past tense 'took' fits if referring to childhood. Reordering clarifies meaning. Consider 'I inherited these skills from my mom' for clearer expression. ID:11

× But honestly, I, uh, can't go uh, garden alone.

✓ But honestly, I can't go to the gallery alone.

The word 'garden' is incorrect given the question about the gallery; 'go to' is the correct verb+preposition. Also remove filler words and keep 'alone' after the verb phrase. ID:8

× Uh, I need to go with someone who makes me fun and who I enjoy, spend my time.

✓ I need to go with someone who is fun and with whom I enjoy spending my time.

'Makes me fun' is incorrect; use 'is fun'. Also 'who I enjoy, spend my time' needs proper relative clause with preposition: 'with whom I enjoy spending my time' or 'who I enjoy spending time with'. ID:12

× If my memory serves, my ride, I usually go with my, uh, friend John and it that was so fun.

✓ If my memory serves me right, I usually go with my friend John, and that is so much fun.

Fix the idiom 'If my memory serves me right' and remove unnecessary 'my ride'. Use present tense 'is' for habitual situations and 'so much fun' for natural phrasing. ID:26

× To be honest, I enjoy when it comes to topic like art, uh, probably I can't say I know more about art like in the modern art and the old art gallery, I like to explore them a lot in the uh, drawing a repeat after artist, uh.

✓ To be honest, I enjoy topics related to art. I can't say I know a lot about modern or classical art, but I like to explore them and study artists by copying their drawings.

Multiple problems: 'enjoy when it comes to topic' should be 'enjoy topics related to'; tense and quantifier issues ('know more' unclear) corrected to 'know a lot about'. 'Old art' changed to 'classical art' or 'traditional art'. 'Drawing a repeat after artist' is unclear — replace with 'study artists by copying their drawings' to express learning technique. ID:6

× No, I didn't actually, as I mentioned before, it's my, uh, skills, uh, since my childhood, I took after from my mother the skills and that when I worked hard, I always, uh, drawing, I was always drawing with my mom, with my sister, with my family.

✓ No, I didn't. As I mentioned before, these are skills I've had since my childhood; I inherited them from my mother. When I was young I worked hard and was always drawing with my mom, my sister, and my family.

Use present perfect 'I've had' for continuing states from childhood. 'Took after from my mother the skills' is wrong order; use 'inherited them from my mother' or 'I learned them from my mother'. Use past continuous 'was always drawing' for past habitual action. Simplify and reorder for clarity. ID:5

× And that actually in my home there was so many my art.

✓ And actually, there was so much of my art in my home.

'Many' is used with countable nouns; 'art' is uncountable, so use 'much' or rephrase to 'many pieces of my art'. Also word order should be natural: 'there was so much of my art in my home.' ID:1