Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn nêu ý tốt nhưng cần ngắn gọn hơn, cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No + lý do ngắn), sau đó thêm một hoặc hai câu bổ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi chia động từ (transcend → transcends) và thiếu từ cuối câu. Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it inspires my creativity. For example, when I sketch landscapes I feel more relaxed and imaginative. I also believe drawing is a universal language that transcends cultural boundaries and can convey emotions without words.

Sugerencia: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu quá dài, có lỗi thừa từ và cấu trúc lặp (would enhance would be). Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và sửa lỗi danh từ đếm/không đếm (art gallery → art galleries). Hạn chế lặp ý (I also enjoy...).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often visit art galleries at the weekend. I usually take my brother, who studies fashion design, because the exhibitions provide great inspiration for his projects. I also enjoy seeing different styles and discovering new artists.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời bắt đầu bằng từ không phù hợp ('Bye') và có cấu trúc lộn xộn, lặp nhấn mạnh không cần thiết. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + lí do), sắp xếp ý theo thì thời gian (past → present) và nêu kế hoạch hoặc mong muốn cụ thể nếu có. Tránh câu quá dài, tách thành 2-3 câu ngắn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it inspired me when I was younger. However, I have had less time recently due to work and studies. In the future I hope to take evening classes or workshops to develop my skills.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời có ý nhưng mắc lỗi thì (learn → learned), lặp ý về thời thơ ấu và sử dụng từ mơ hồ ('talent'). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp, đưa một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động hoặc kỷ niệm, và kết luận ngắn gọn về mục đích vẽ (creativity, emotion).

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned basic drawing at school when I was a child, but I never took formal lessons outside class. I enjoyed sketching during my free time because it helped me express my emotions and boost my creativity. Even now I still draw occasionally as a hobby.

× I find joy and inspiration in drawing and it helps me enrich my creativity and I also think drawing is a universal form of language that transcend boundaries.

✓ I find joy and inspiration in drawing; it helps me enrich my creativity, and I also think drawing is a universal form of language that transcends boundaries.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement and sentence structure issues. 'that transcend boundaries' should be 'that transcends boundaries' because the singular noun 'form' requires a singular verb. The original is also a run-on with multiple clauses; use punctuation or conjunctions to join them clearly. Suggestion: split with a semicolon or period and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× Just looking at drawing, you can feel the emotion of the drawer without any language and.

✓ Just by looking at a drawing, you can feel the artist's emotion without any words.

The original has awkward phrase order and an extra conjunction 'and' at the end. 'Looking at drawing' needs an article: 'a drawing'. 'Drawer' is incorrect in this context; 'artist' is the appropriate noun. 'Without any language' is unnatural; use 'without any words'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and complete the sentence without trailing conjunctions.

× Every weekend, I tend to take my brother to go to art galleries with me because he's studying a fashion design and going to art gallery would enhance would be a great inspiration for him.

✓ Every weekend, I tend to take my brother to art galleries with me because he's studying fashion design, and going to art galleries would be a great inspiration for him.

Errors include unnecessary 'a' before 'fashion design' and inconsistent article use for 'art galleries'. 'Studying a fashion design' should be 'studying fashion design'. Also 'going to art gallery' needs plural or article: 'going to art galleries' or 'an art gallery'. Repetition 'would enhance would be' is incorrect; keep 'would be'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and correct verb phrase repetition.

× Myself, I also enjoy going to art gallery.

✓ I also enjoy going to art galleries myself.

Using 'Myself' at the start is unnatural; place the reflexive for emphasis at the end ('myself') or omit it. Also 'art gallery' needs article or plural; use 'art galleries'. Suggestion: prefer 'I also enjoy going to art galleries' or add 'myself' for emphasis at the end.

× Bye. When I was younger I was really fascinated by art and it strongly inspired me and I want, I really want to do something related to art, but as I grow older I don't have the time and effort to follow that dream when I was young.

✓ When I was younger, I was really fascinated by art and it strongly inspired me, and I really wanted to do something related to art, but as I grew older I didn't have the time to follow that dream.

Several tense inconsistencies and unnecessary words. Start 'Bye.' is inappropriate in this context. Maintain past tense for past desires: 'I really wanted'. Use past 'grew' and past negative 'didn't have' to match timeframe. 'Time and effort to follow that dream when I was young' is redundant; simplify to 'didn't have the time to follow that dream.' Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and remove extraneous fillers.

× I only learn drawing at school when I was a kid, so I don't have much talent in drawing, but I really enjoy drawing as a hobby when I was a kid.

✓ I only learned drawing at school when I was a kid, so I don't have much talent for drawing, but I really enjoyed drawing as a hobby when I was a kid.

Tense inconsistency: 'learn' should be past 'learned' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Don't have much talent in drawing' is better as 'don't have much talent for drawing'. Also second clause should be past: 'really enjoyed'. Suggestion: match past time frame and use correct collocation 'talent for'.

× Umm to enhance my creativity and also express my emotion.

✓ I did it to enhance my creativity and to express my emotions.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Add subject and verb: 'I did it' or 'I drew' to complete the thought. Use 'to express my emotions' (plural) which is more natural. Suggestion: always include a finite verb and consider parallel structure with two 'to' infinitives.