Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar; use one clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific example or reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also correct subject-verb agreement and remove fillers (e.g., "it it").

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it helps me express my ideas and relaxes me. For example, when I feel stressed I sketch landscapes for 30 minutes, which calms me and boosts my creativity. Overall, drawing is a satisfying hobby that helps me think more clearly.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid repetition of place names. Be specific about what you like in the gallery and use linking words to explain why it matters to you. Keep it under five sentences and use singular/plural consistently.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries, especially the Shilpa Charya Academy and Shishu Academy in Bangladesh. I like them because they display student work and step-by-step demonstrations, which inspire my own drawings. Also, the exhibitions often include workshops where visitors can learn new techniques.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly, fix grammar and word order, avoid repeated words, and explain specific areas you want to learn (e.g., color theory, perspective). Use linking words to connect reasons and limit to 2–3 supporting details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more about art, especially color theory and perspective. Learning these techniques would improve my sketches and help me create more realistic portraits. In addition, practicing art often relaxes me and improves my concentration.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear timeline and use correct verb tenses; avoid confusing or unclear phrases. Start with a topic sentence about whether you learned as a child, then give specific examples of how your skill developed and what you still want to improve. Use linking words like 'however' or 'since then'.

Ejemplo: When I was a child I didn't draw very well, but I improved a lot as I practised. For example, after taking weekly classes for two years I can now sketch figures quickly and accurately. However, I still need to work on my colouring and shading skills, so I plan to practice those techniques.

× Yes, I obviously like drawing very much.

✓ Yes, I obviously like drawing very much.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to express a general preference. Keep the adverb 'obviously' before the verb for emphasis.

× It helps me to express my ideas by art and it it relaxes my mind and it gives me pleasure.

✓ It helps me express my ideas through art, relaxes my mind, and gives me pleasure.

Errors: extra 'it', unnecessary 'to' after 'helps', incorrect preposition 'by' for medium, and run-on coordination. Use present simple verbs in a coordinated list: 'helps me express', 'relaxes', 'gives'. Use 'through art' to indicate medium.

× It is the hobby that I admire every time and it gives me a satisfying outlet.

✓ It is a hobby I always enjoy and it provides a satisfying outlet.

'The hobby that I admire every time' is awkward and wordy. Use 'a hobby I always enjoy' for natural English. 'Provides' is a clearer verb than 'gives' in this context.

× The creativity I can express by it.

✓ I can express my creativity through it.

This sentence is a fragment and uses awkward word order and preposition. Make a full sentence with subject + modal + verb and use 'through' for medium.

× Yeah, actually enjoy going to art exhibition, art galleries.

✓ Yeah, I actually enjoy going to art exhibitions and art galleries.

Missing subject 'I' and plural 'exhibitions' when speaking generally. Use 'and' to link nouns.

× My favorite art exhibition is Shilpa Chary Academy in Bangladesh and Bangladesh, Bangladesh Shishu Academy.

✓ My favorite art exhibitions are the Shilpa Chary Academy and the Bangladesh Shishu Academy in Bangladesh.

When naming specific institutions, use the definite article where appropriate and match number (plural) if listing more than one. Rearrange 'in Bangladesh' to clearly refer to location.

× It is very good exhibition for children and the person who likes to draw and they know about though know many things about it.

✓ They are very good exhibitions for children and for people who like to draw; visitors can learn many things there.

Pronoun and number mismatch: 'it' should be 'they' for multiple exhibitions. 'Person' should be plural 'people'. 'They know about though know many things' is unclear; restructure to 'visitors can learn many things there'.

× Yeah, maybe I want to learn about art.

✓ Yes, I would like to learn more about art.

'Maybe I want' is awkward in this context; 'would like to' is a more natural polite expression of desire. Use 'more' if indicating additional learning.

× Exploring different types of designs and techniques help will help me in everything improves.

✓ Exploring different types of designs and techniques will help me improve in many areas.

Original has duplicated modal ('help will help') and incorrect word order. Use future 'will help' + base verb 'improve'. 'In everything improves' is ungrammatical; change to 'improve in many areas'.

× It will improve my own creativity, such as when I try sketching or visiting galleries.

✓ It will improve my creativity, for example when I try sketching or visit galleries.

Minor stylistic change: 'own' is unnecessary. Keep parallel verb forms: 'try sketching' (gerund) and 'visit galleries' (base verb) — better to use 'visit' to match 'try' + gerund or change both; here adjusted to 'visit' for simple activity.

× Learning learning art also lyrics, lyrics may relaxes me.

✓ Learning art also helps me relax; sometimes listening to music or lyrics relaxes me.

Sentence had repetition 'Learning learning' and unclear noun 'lyrics' used incorrectly. 'May relaxes' mixes modal and third person singular. Use 'helps me relax' or 'relaxes me' correctly.

× Oh yeah, it was quite interesting because when I was child I didn't draw, draw very good and nicely.

✓ Oh yeah, it was quite interesting because when I was a child I couldn't draw very well or nicely.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. 'Didn't draw ... very good' is incorrect: use 'couldn't draw' or 'didn't draw well'; 'well' is the adverb form. Remove duplicate 'draw'.

× But when I grow or grow, I draw very beautiful love.

✓ But as I grew, I began to draw much more beautifully.

Tense mismatch and repeated words. 'When I grow' should be past 'as I grew'. 'Draw very beautiful love' is nonsensical; likely meant 'draw much more beautifully'.

× I actually Draw Something in just quite seconds it and it will be very beautiful.

✓ I can actually draw something in just a few seconds, and it turns out very beautifully.

Capitalization 'Draw' incorrect. Sentence had extra words and awkward tense. Use 'can draw' for ability and 'in a few seconds' for time; 'turns out' or 'looks' for result.

× But my color skills is not better and I think I will pray.

✓ But my coloring skills are not very good, and I think I will practice.

'Skills' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. 'Color skills' is better as 'coloring skills'. 'I think I will pray' is likely wrong word choice; 'practice' fits context about improving skills.