Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is a bit long and somewhat unclear due to redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and structured by directly answering the question first, then adding specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and ensure clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like drawing because I started learning to paint when I was a child. I spent a lot of time with my tutor practicing sketches, which helped me develop my skills and enjoy drawing more.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating words. Also, focus on clear sentence structure and correct verb forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I live in New York, which has many museums and art galleries. Moreover, I have opportunities to explore different exhibitions and even chat with artists, which makes the experience very enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Your answer has several hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh', and use correct singular/plural forms. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to learn more about art. Although I am an architecture student and work as an architect, I am not a professional artist. So far, I have learned about art by myself through videos and movies, but I would like to study it more formally.

Sugerencia: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors and repetitions. Make sure to finish your sentences and avoid repeating words. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I started learning to draw when I was five years old. My tutor was a professor at an art college, and he taught children with the same dedication as he did adults. This approach was very helpful for my development.

× I spent a lot of time traveling and with my tutor and to have have painted a lot of sketches and that is kind of my starting point to learn how to draw and start to like it.

✓ I spent a lot of time traveling with my tutor and have painted a lot of sketches, and that is kind of my starting point to learn how to draw and start to like it.

The phrase 'to have have painted' contains a repetition and incorrect verb form. The correct past participle form 'have painted' should be used without duplication. Also, 'and with my tutor' is better connected directly to 'traveling' without 'and' to improve sentence flow.

× I spent a lot of time traveling and with my tutor and to have have painted a lot of sketches and that is kind of my starting point to learn how to draw and start to like it.

✓ I spent a lot of time traveling with my tutor and have painted a lot of sketches, and that is kind of my starting point to learn how to draw and start to like it.

The preposition 'and with my tutor' is incorrectly placed. It should be 'traveling with my tutor' to correctly link the activity and the companion.

× Yes, I do like because I'm living in New York right now and you know, New York is really a big city that with a lot of museums, art galleries, a lot of fun there.

✓ Yes, I do like it because I'm living in New York right now, and you know, New York is really a big city with a lot of museums, art galleries, and a lot of fun.

The phrase 'that with a lot of museums' is incorrect; 'with a lot of museums' should directly follow 'city'. Also, 'a lot of fun there' is better as 'a lot of fun' to avoid awkward placement of 'there'.

× This I really enjoying the moment like that.

✓ I really enjoy moments like that.

The phrase 'I really enjoying' is incorrect; the verb should be in the simple present form 'enjoy' to match the subject and tense. Also, 'the moment like that' is better as 'moments like that' for natural expression.

× Yes, kiss. To be honest, I'm only umm, like architectural students and even work as architects.

✓ Yes, sure. To be honest, I'm only an architectural student and even work as an architect.

'kiss' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'sure'. 'Students' and 'architects' are plural, but the subject is singular 'I', so singular forms 'student' and 'architect' should be used. Also, the article 'an' is needed before 'architectural student' and 'architect'.

× I'm not quite uh, like professional as a artist or art student and I learned something about art only by myself and by watching some videos or movies.

✓ I'm not quite, uh, like a professional artist or art student, and I learned something about art only by myself and by watching some videos or movies.

The article 'a' is missing before 'professional artist'. Also, 'like professional as a artist' is incorrect; it should be 'like a professional artist'. Commas improve clarity.

× Yes, as I mentioned before, I was starting to learn how to draw when I was only 5 years old and I met a very good tutor.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, I started to learn how to draw when I was only 5 years old, and I met a very good tutor.

The phrase 'I was starting to learn' is awkward in past tense narration; simple past 'I started to learn' is more appropriate and natural.

× He taught kids in a way that he would like to to taught the other adults in his universities.

✓ He taught kids in a way that he would like to teach other adults in his university.

'to to taught' is incorrect; it should be 'to teach'. Also, 'universities' should be singular 'university' if referring to one institution. The pronoun 'the other adults' is better as 'other adults'.