Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. For example, avoid repeating phrases like 'I am good at drawing' and instead explain why you enjoy it or how it makes you feel.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it allows me to express my creativity. When I was young, I often drew pictures that made my parents proud, and their praise encouraged me to keep improving.

Sugerencia: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, explain your reasons more clearly and avoid vague expressions like 'very bold' and 'many collectings'.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I don't enjoy going to galleries because I find them quite overwhelming. Although galleries and museums have many interesting collections that are useful for learning, I personally prefer other ways to appreciate art.

Sugerencia: Make your answer more natural by using clearer expressions and linking words. Explain what kind of feelings or emotions art gives you to add specific supporting details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it evokes strong emotions and helps me understand different perspectives. For instance, some paintings can make me feel peaceful or inspired.

Sugerencia: Avoid unclear or contradictory statements. Provide a clear and direct answer with supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and improve coherence.

Ejemplo: I never took formal drawing lessons as a child because I was confident in my skills. However, I did learn about art in school, which helped me understand different techniques and styles.

× Yes, I like drawing because I I am good at drawing, maybe I think.

✓ Yes, I like drawing because I am good at drawing, I think.

The sentence contains a repetition of the pronoun 'I' which is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence structure and maintains the present tense appropriately.

× And when I was young I was good at drawing.

✓ And when I was young, I was good at drawing.

A comma after the introductory phrase 'when I was young' improves readability and sentence structure. The past tense usage is correct here.

× So I was proud of my drawing for my mom and dad.

✓ So I was proud of my drawings to my mom and dad.

The phrase 'proud of my drawing for my mom and dad' is awkward. Using the plural 'drawings' and the preposition 'to' better expresses the intended meaning of showing pride in the artworks presented to parents.

× They also praised me.

✓ They also praised me.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses the past tense to describe a past event.

× To be honest, I don't like go to the gallery because it's very bold and gallery and museum have many collectings, so it's very useful for many people, but I don't like it.

✓ To be honest, I don't like going to the gallery because it's very dull and galleries and museums have many collections, so it's very useful for many people, but I don't like it.

The verb after 'don't like' should be in the '-ing' form ('going'). 'Bold' is likely a misuse for 'dull' to express dislike. 'Gallery' and 'museum' should be plural ('galleries' and 'museums') to match the plural verb 'have'. 'Collectings' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'collections'.

× Yes, if I have some chance to learn about art, I want to learn about art because art gives many feelings and some sense, so I like such emotion.

✓ Yes, if I have a chance to learn about art, I want to learn about art because art gives many feelings and some sense, so I like such emotions.

'Some chance' is better expressed as 'a chance'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to agree with 'many feelings'. The modal verb usage is appropriate here.

× I've never learned about drawing because I just, I was too good at drawing by myself.

✓ I've never learned drawing because I was too good at drawing by myself.

The phrase 'learned about drawing' is better as 'learned drawing'. The phrase 'I just,' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. The past tense 'was' is correctly used.

× So I don't have to learn that.

✓ So I didn't have to learn that.

Since the context is about the past, the present tense 'don't have to' should be changed to past tense 'didn't have to' to maintain tense consistency.

× So I just learn about art in my school.

✓ So I just learned about art in my school.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past context of the sentence.

× Just imperative factor, yeah.

✓ It was just an imperative factor, yeah.

The original sentence lacks a verb and is incomplete. Adding 'It was' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.