Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is quite natural and you express your feelings well, but there are some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "draw portraits of language" and "do it down some of the pictures". Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it helps me relieve stress and channel my emotions. Usually, I sketch various pictures, including portraits, which allows me to relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains grammatical mistakes and some awkward phrasing like "venture in the art gallery" and "I just visit to one of the historical sites". Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating words like "things things". Use linking words such as "for example" or "also" to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love visiting art galleries because they offer an enriching experience. For example, I recently visited a historical site with many galleries where I admired the boldness and innovation of modern art, which helped me broaden my horizons.

Sugerencia: Your answer conveys your interest but has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "admire to learn" and "increase my power of creativity". Try to use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words like "not only... but also" properly to make your answer coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to learn more about art because it not only helps me expand my horizons but also enhances my creativity. Learning about art provides me with valuable insights, which I believe are essential for personal growth.

Sugerencia: Your answer is quite unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and confusing phrases like "learned 20", "gamble in art", and "helped me to drop you to full drawings". Try to use simple and clear sentences to describe your experience. Also, avoid unnecessary words and focus on directly answering the question with supporting details.

Ejemplo: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child. Although I was not very skilled at first, my teacher encouraged me to explore my creativity and helped me improve by teaching me how to draw landscapes. She became one of my role models.

× I really like drawing because it works as a stressbuster for me and I think the process of drawing is cathartic.

✓ I really like drawing because it works as a stressbuster for me and I think the process of drawing is cathartic.

No correction needed here as the use of 'drawing' as a gerund is correct.

× So it really helps me to channel my emotions and usually I just do it down some of the pictures and sometimes I just draw portraits of language.

✓ So it really helps me to channel my emotions and usually I just do some drawings, and sometimes I just draw portraits of people.

The phrase 'do it down some of the pictures' is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be corrected to 'do some drawings' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'portraits of language' is incorrect; likely intended 'portraits of people' or 'portraits of faces'. Clear sentence structure improves understanding.

× I think I love to venture in the art gallery because I think visiting there is a enriching experience.

✓ I think I love to venture into the art gallery because I think visiting there is an enriching experience.

The correct preposition with 'venture' when entering a place is 'into', not 'in'. Also, 'an enriching experience' requires the article 'an' before the adjective starting with a vowel sound.

× I get more knowledge about historical things things and it really helps me to expand my horizon.

✓ I get more knowledge about historical things and it really helps me to expand my horizons.

The word 'things' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'horizon' in this context is usually pluralized as 'horizons' to indicate broadening one's perspective.

× Also, recently I just visit to one of the historical sites with many art galleries and there I saw the audacity and innovation of modern art.

✓ Also, recently I just visited one of the historical sites with many art galleries and there I saw the audacity and innovation of modern art.

The verb 'visit' should be in the past tense 'visited' to match the adverb 'recently' indicating a past action. Also, 'visit to' is incorrect; 'visit' does not require 'to' after it.

× I really admire to learn more about art because it is not only helped me expand my horizon but also increase my power of creativity.

✓ I really want to learn more about art because it has not only helped me expand my horizons but also increased my creativity.

The verb 'admire' is incorrectly used with 'to learn'; 'want to learn' is more appropriate. Also, the tense should be present perfect 'has helped' and 'has increased' to indicate past actions with present relevance. 'Power of creativity' is better expressed as 'creativity'.

× And by learning more about art, I can do more creative and it really helps me because it gives me the profound wisdom which is very essential.

✓ And by learning more about art, I can be more creative and it really helps me because it gives me profound wisdom which is very essential.

The phrase 'do more creative' is incorrect; it should be 'be more creative'. Also, 'the profound wisdom' should be 'profound wisdom' without 'the' as it is uncountable here.

× And also I think art is really essential to know about.

✓ And also I think art is really essential to know about.

No correction needed; sentence is acceptable though slightly informal.

× Yes, I learned 20 when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I learned to draw when I was a kid.

The phrase 'learned 20' is unclear and likely a typo. It should be 'learned to draw' to correctly express the action learned in the past.

× I was initially was not a average artist, but I still gamble in art sometime.

✓ I was initially not an average artist, but I still dabbled in art sometimes.

The sentence has redundant 'was' and incorrect article 'a' before a vowel sound word 'average' which should be 'an'. 'Gamble in art' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'dabbled in art'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'.

× I still remember I had this one teacher who guides me to explore my creativity and she also helped me to drop you to full drawings of landscape.

✓ I still remember I had this one teacher who guided me to explore my creativity and she also helped me to draw full drawings of landscapes.

The verb 'guides' should be past tense 'guided' to match past context. 'Drop you to full drawings' is incorrect; it should be 'helped me to draw full drawings'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'.

× Yeah, so she's one of my idol who helped me to join.

✓ Yeah, so she's one of my idols who helped me to improve.

'Idol' should be plural 'idols' as 'one of' requires plural noun. 'Helped me to join' is unclear; likely intended 'helped me to improve' or 'helped me to develop'.