Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases and tense errors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I can remember some dreams, but only briefly. For example, I often wake up recalling a scene related to things I was thinking about before bed, such as a conversation or a movie, although the memory fades quickly.

Sugerencia: Use a clear topic sentence and correct small grammatical mistakes. Provide one specific example and a linking word to explain when you share and when you don't.

Ejemplo: I usually share amusing dreams with close friends, but I keep private or vivid dreams to myself. For instance, if a dream is funny or harmless I will tell my roommate, whereas emotional or personal dreams I prefer not to discuss.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion in one sentence and then support it with a specific reason or example. Fix incomplete sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

Ejemplo: I think dreams can sometimes have meaning because they often reflect our current thoughts and emotions. However, other dreams may be random, for example when I watch a thriller before bed I occasionally dream about similar tense situations.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct answer and then add a specific example or plan. Improve grammar and coherence by using linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Ejemplo: Definitely — I want to make my dreams come true because achieving them gives me purpose. For example, I am studying English intensively so I can work abroad, and although overcoming obstacles is hard, I keep making a weekly study plan to stay on track.

× Sometimes I can remember what dream I have before, but I usually forget it when I wake up.

✓ Sometimes I can remember the dreams I had before, but I usually forget them when I wake up.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly. 'what dream I have before' should be past to match 'before' and 'remember' referring to past events: use 'the dreams I had before'. Also 'it' is vague for plural 'dreams' so use 'them' for correct pronoun reference.

× I think most of my dreams really relevant to my thinking before sleeping.

✓ I think most of my dreams are really relevant to my thoughts before sleeping.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' for the linking structure 'dreams are relevant'. 'Thinking' should be plural 'thoughts' to sound natural. 'Really' modifies 'relevant' and is acceptable; keep it before 'relevant'.

× I often share my funny dreams with my friends, but if it is personal I always keep it be by myself.

✓ I often share my funny dreams with my friends, but if a dream is personal I always keep it to myself.

Pronouns are misused: 'it' and 'keep it be by myself' are incorrect. Use 'a dream' or 'it' consistently, and the correct phrase is 'keep it to myself' (not 'be by myself'). Also clarify singular/plural: 'if a dream is personal'.

× I feel that dreams usually reflect our thinking and it's just a little bit.

✓ I feel that dreams usually reflect our thinking, but only to a small extent.

'and it's just a little bit' is an incomplete and unclear clause. Use 'but only to a small extent' to convey the intended meaning. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Sometimes it reflects our thought and feeling.

✓ Sometimes they reflect our thoughts and feelings.

Subject-verb agreement and number: 'dreams' (plural) requires 'they reflect' not 'it reflects'. Also 'thought' and 'feeling' should be plural and parallel: 'thoughts and feelings'.

× I think we usually dream about what we are thinking before going to sleep, but sometimes it.

✓ I think we usually dream about what we are thinking before going to sleep, but sometimes we do not.

The clause 'but sometimes it.' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with a complete contrast such as 'but sometimes we do not' to indicate exceptions. Maintain present tense for consistency.

× Definitely, I usually pursue my dreams and I find that overcoming your obstacle is the most challenging task in my life, but I still would like to do it.

✓ Definitely. I usually pursue my dreams, and I find that overcoming obstacles is the most challenging task in my life, but I still want to do it.

Several issues: sentence flow and articles. 'your obstacle' is inconsistent with speaker perspective; use 'obstacles' (general plural) or 'an obstacle'. 'Would like to do it' is awkward here; 'want to do it' is more direct. Also add commas and split into clearer sentences. 'Pursue my dreams' keeps present habitual tense.