Teacher— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 명확히 하세요. 질문에 바로 답하는 주제 문장을 만들고 불필요한 망설임(umm, uh)을 줄이세요. 예: 'Yes, my favourite teacher was my high school counselor.' 그런 다음 이유를 연결사(for example, because)로 자연스럽게 이어 구체적인 예시를 추가하세요. 또한 'picture'는 잘못된 단어이므로 'teacher'나 'counsellor'로 고치고, 'navigate' 대신 'help'나 'guide'가 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, my favourite teacher was my high school counselor. She always helped students find their own path and gave practical advice about relationships, for example by suggesting ways to communicate more openly with friends.

Sugerencia: 간단하고 직접적으로 답하세요. 시간 표현과 명사형(‘information’)의 단수/복수 형태를 정확히 사용하고, 불필요한 단어를 줄이세요. 또한 이유를 덧붙일 때는 연결어(so, because)를 적절히 사용해 논리적으로 만드세요.

Ejemplo: Not really. I graduated from primary school about 20 years ago, so it is very difficult to contact my old teachers because I don't have their current information.

Sugerencia: 의도를 명확히 하고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 'support me to find my own way'는 'support me in finding my way' 등으로 고치고, 예시 문장은 완전한 문장으로 연결하세요. 또한 'Infirmary tips'는 의미가 불분명하므로 정확한 표현('practical tips' 또는 'useful advice')을 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: My high school counselor supported me in finding my own direction. For example, when I had problems with friendships, she gave me practical advice on how to communicate and resolve conflicts.

Sugerencia: 의미가 불명확한 표현들을 정리하세요. 질문에는 명확한 의사(yes/no)를 먼저 말하고, 이유와 계획을 간결하게 설명하세요. 숫자나 기간을 말할 때는 정확하게 표현하고, 중복되는 표현('I would I always')을 피하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future. I have always wanted to teach history, and I plan to gain the necessary qualifications and a few years of experience before applying for a teaching position.

× Yes, umm, definitely I have a favorite picture to uh was my high school counselor.

✓ Yes, um, definitely my favorite teacher was my high school counselor.

The student used 'picture' instead of 'teacher' and an incorrect clause structure 'to uh was'. Use 'my favorite teacher was' to state a past fact. Also 'definitely I have' is awkward; 'definitely my favorite teacher was' is natural. Suggestion: Replace incorrect noun and restructure to 'my favorite teacher was my high school counselor.'

× She always like navigate students to find their own way and give advice about umm the relationships between people so I can.

✓ She always liked to guide students to find their own way and give advice about relationships between people.

The student used 'like' where past tense 'liked' or modal 'likes to' is needed and 'navigate' is unnatural for this meaning — 'guide' is better. 'So I can' is incomplete and unnecessary. Suggest using consistent past tense: 'She always liked to guide students...'. Suggestion: Use 'liked to guide' and remove the incomplete clause.

× Not really since I graduated my primary school around like 20 years ago.

✓ Not really, since I graduated from primary school around 20 years ago.

In English we say 'graduate from school' not 'graduate my school'. The article 'my' is optional; 'primary school' without 'my' is natural here. Also remove filler 'like' in this formal sentence. Suggestion: Use 'graduated from primary school around 20 years ago.'

× So it's umm, really completely challenging to contact them and then find their informations to get touch with them.

✓ So it's really difficult to contact them and find their contact information.

'Completely challenging' is awkward; 'difficult' is natural. 'Informations' is wrong — 'information' is uncountable. 'Get touch with them' should be 'get in touch with them' or 'contact them.' Suggestion: Use 'contact' and uncountable 'information.'

× Actually my high school teacher always like support me to find my own way.

✓ Actually my high school teacher always supported me in finding my own way.

Use past tense 'supported' to match 'teacher' role in the past. Also use 'support someone in doing something' or 'support someone to find'—the gerund form 'in finding' is more natural here. 'Always like support' is incorrect. Suggestion: Use 'always supported me in finding my own way.'

× For example, if I struggle with like someone's relationship.

✓ For example, if I struggled with someone's relationship issues.

Sentence fragment and tense mismatch. Make it a complete clause and match past tense used elsewhere ('struggled'). 'Someone's relationship' is vague; 'relationship issues' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'if I struggled with someone's relationship issues.'

× She gave me really helpful Infirmary tips to get along with other people.

✓ She gave me really helpful interpersonal tips to get along with other people.

'Infirmary' is the wrong word (relates to medical clinic). The intended word is likely 'interpersonal'. Capitalization of 'Infirmary' is wrong. 'Helpful interpersonal tips' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'interpersonal tips' for advice about relationships.

× I would say in case of like can't touch like current history in the school, it would be about 3 to like to achieve my goal.

✓ I would say that if I can't teach current history at school, it would take me about three years to achieve my goal.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Can't touch like current history' is incorrect; use 'can't teach current history'. 'It would be about 3 to like to achieve my goal' is unclear—likely means 'it would take about three years.' Use 'that' to introduce the clause and 'take me about three years.' Suggestion: Rephrase to 'if I can't teach current history at school, it would take me about three years to achieve my goal.'

× I would I always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.

✓ I have always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.

'I would I always wanted' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'have always wanted' to express a desire that started in the past and continues to the present. Keep infinitive 'to teach history.' Suggestion: Use 'I have always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.'