Perfume— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and a pronoun error ('their' → 'its').

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I use a light perfume every day because it helps me feel fresh and confident; however, I avoid heavy spraying since strong scents can bother others or trigger allergies.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and complete the supporting detail. Replace unclear phrases ('spray per my perfume', 'my sense is') and use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I put on perfume every morning because it makes me feel fresh and energetic. In addition, some friends often compliment my scent, which boosts my confidence.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and sensitive in wording. Give a brief reason and an example. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to structure the answer and avoid potentially confusing phrasing ('many girlfriends').

Ejemplo: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift because many of my friends enjoy beauty products; for example, I recently gave a floral fragrance to a friend who loved light, fresh scents.

Sugerencia: Provide a clearer opinion and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for instance'. Avoid sentence fragments and finish your thought about price.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think many perfumes are expensive, especially designer brands, because they use costly ingredients and invest in branding and packaging; for instance, natural essential oils and long development times can raise the price.

× 'Yes, I use perfume every day, but I think too much spray perfume is not good for daily routines because sometimes when their smell is too strong it can affect some people.'

✓ 'Yes, I use perfume every day, but I think spraying too much perfume is not good for daily routines because sometimes when its smell is too strong it can affect some people.'

'spray perfume' is an incorrect form here; use the gerund 'spraying' to indicate the action. Also 'their smell' is incorrect because 'perfume' is singular; use the possessive pronoun 'its'. Suggestion: use 'spraying too much perfume' and 'its smell' to be grammatically correct.'

× 'Yes, I spray per my perfume every morning because I feel more fresh and vibrant every time I have my perfume on.'

✓ 'Yes, I spray my perfume on every morning because I feel fresher and more vibrant whenever I wear it.'

'spray per my perfume' is ungrammatical; the correct construction is 'spray my perfume on' or 'spray on my perfume'. 'Feel more fresh' should be 'feel fresher' (comparative adjective) and 'every time I have my perfume on' is better as 'whenever I wear it'. Use '-ing' not required here, but verb phrase ordering and adjective form needed.'

× 'Besides that, my friends tell me that my sense is.'

✓ 'Besides that, my friends tell me that I have a good sense of smell.'

'my sense is' is incomplete and vague. English requires a full noun phrase; 'sense of smell' describes the ability and 'good' is the adjective. Suggestion: use 'I have a good sense of smell' to convey the intended meaning.'

× 'Yes, I have many girlfriends so I usually buy perfumes for their presents and I think most of them like beauty products, so perfumes as gifts are the best choice.'

✓ 'Yes, I have many girlfriends, so I usually buy perfumes as presents for them, and I think most of them like beauty products, so perfumes are the best choice.'

'buy perfumes for their presents' uses 'their' incorrectly; the recipient is 'them' and 'presents' should be the object: 'buy perfumes as presents for them'. Also 'perfumes as gifts are the best choice' is awkward; 'perfumes are the best choice' is clearer.'

× 'Yes, especially high end products, I don't know why it is so expensive, but I think the procedures of making them might be difficult. So the price.'

✓ 'Yes, especially high-end products. I don't know why they are so expensive, but I think the manufacturing processes might be complex, which increases the price.'

Original contains sentence fragments and mismatched pronouns. 'high end products' should be hyphenated 'high-end products'. 'it is so expensive' is wrong because 'products' is plural so use 'they are'. 'the procedures of making them might be difficult' is wordy; 'manufacturing processes might be complex' is clearer. 'So the price.' is a fragment; combine into a full sentence explaining that complexity increases price.'