Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Sua resposta é clara, mas pode ser mais natural e fluida. Evite repetições como "in the school" e "in school" e use conectores para ligar as ideias. Além disso, tente usar vocabulário mais variado para descrever a celebração.

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually spend the whole day at school attending classes. However, in the evening, my family and I celebrate by eating cake and various snacks together.

Sugerencia: A resposta apresenta erros gramaticais e falta de clareza. Use o passado corretamente e organize melhor as ideias. Evite frases confusas e use conectores para melhorar a coesão.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I always had big celebrations with my friends and family. We ate chocolate cake and lots of candies, and sometimes we went to a large park with many attractions and food stalls.

Sugerencia: A resposta tem erros de pronúncia e vocabulário incorreto, como "Onyx day". Tente usar palavras corretas e expressar suas ideias de forma clara e natural, com frases completas e conectores.

Ejemplo: I think celebrating my birthday is very important because it is a special day in your life. It's your own day to appreciate and spend time with people you really care about.

Sugerencia: A resposta é muito curta e não demonstra esforço para desenvolver a ideia. Mesmo que você não conheça pessoas na China, tente dar uma opinião geral ou falar sobre tradições para enriquecer a resposta.

Ejemplo: Although I don't know anyone living in China, I believe that celebrating the birthdays of close family members, like parents or grandparents, is very important in Chinese culture.

× When I was young I always do a big celebrate with different friends and all my family, eat a chocolate cake and a lot of candies and go to a a big salad with a lot of parks and food.

✓ When I was young I always did a big celebration with different friends and all my family, ate a chocolate cake and a lot of candies and went to a big salad with a lot of parks and food.

The sentence describes past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Do' should be 'did', 'celebrate' should be 'celebration' (noun), 'eat' should be 'ate', and 'go' should be 'went'. Also, 'a a big salad' seems to be a typo and should be corrected to 'a big salad'. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when talking about past events and ensure nouns and verbs are used correctly.

× On my birthday I always have classes in the school and I spend all my day in school.

✓ On my birthday I always have classes at school and I spend all my day at school.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'school'. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to attending or being present at a place like school. Suggestion: Use 'at' for locations where activities happen, such as 'at school'.

× eat a cake and different snacks.

✓ eat cake and different snacks.

When referring to cake in a general sense, the article 'a' is unnecessary. 'Eat cake' is more natural unless referring to a specific cake. Suggestion: Omit the article when speaking generally about food items.

× go to a a big salad with a lot of parks and food.

✓ go to a big salad with a lot of parks and food.

The phrase 'a a' is a typo and should be corrected to 'a'. Also, 'salad' seems incorrect in context; possibly 'salad' was intended to be 'salad' or 'salad' is a mishearing of 'salad' or 'salad' is a mistake for 'salad'. However, since the instruction is to only correct grammar mistakes, the typo 'a a' is corrected. Suggestion: Correct typos and ensure prepositions are used properly.

× For me, it's very important to celebrate my birthday because it's an Onyx day in your life that you can in your ear.

✓ For me, it's very important to celebrate my birthday because it's a once-in-a-year day in your life that you can enjoy.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect phrases like 'Onyx day' and 'you can in your ear'. These seem to be errors or mishearings. The phrase 'once-in-a-year day' is a common expression for birthdays. Also, 'you can enjoy' fits the context better. Suggestion: Use clear and correct expressions and pronouns to convey meaning accurately.

× It's your own day and you must appreciate this day and stay with people that you really like.

✓ It's your own day and you must appreciate this day and stay with people whom you really like.

The relative pronoun 'that' is commonly used but 'whom' is more appropriate when referring to people as the object of the verb. Suggestion: Use 'whom' when referring to people as objects in formal contexts.

× I certainly don't have this answer because I didn't know someone that lives in China.

✓ I certainly don't have this answer because I don't know anyone who lives in China.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly ('didn't know' should be 'don't know' to match the present tense 'don't have'). Also, 'someone that' should be 'anyone who' when referring to an indefinite person. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense and use 'anyone who' for indefinite people in negative sentences.