Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: I usually celebrate my birthday with my friends and family. We often have a big party at my home, where everyone enjoys food and music together.

Sugerencia: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Use past tense correctly and provide specific examples of activities. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family. Sometimes, I went to new places with my friends, like the beach, and we enjoyed eating special food together.

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it brings my friends and family together. We enjoy spending time and creating happy memories on this special day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Focus on answering the question directly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct grammar and linking words for clarity.

Ejemplo: I think my friend Rafaat's birthday is important to celebrate in China because he speaks Chinese very well. He feels happy when people celebrate his birthday here.

× Specially birthdays are special day for a bronze life.

✓ Especially birthdays are special days for a bronze life.

The word 'Specially' is incorrect here; it should be 'Especially' to indicate emphasis. Also, 'birthdays' is plural, so 'day' should be plural 'days' to agree in number. 'Bronze life' is unclear but kept as is.

× I usually do.

✓ I usually do.

This sentence is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected to the next sentence or completed to make sense.

× I usually.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday with my friends and family.

This fragment is incomplete. It should be combined with the following sentence to form a complete thought.

× Celebrate my birthday with my friends and families.

✓ I celebrate my birthday with my friends and family.

The verb 'Celebrate' should be 'I celebrate' to form a complete sentence. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family collectively.

× Sometimes it occurs on every students or my home and it's a large party for everyone.

✓ Sometimes it occurs at every student's or my home, and it's a large party for everyone.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect; 'at' is appropriate for locations. 'Every students' should be 'every student's' to show possession.

× When I was young I celebrating my birthday with my family's but most of the time I celebrate my birthday with my friends by exploding new place and going.

✓ When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my family, but most of the time I celebrated my birthday with my friends by exploring new places and going.

The verb 'celebrating' should be past tense 'celebrated' to match 'was young'. 'Family's' should be 'family' as a plural noun. 'Exploding' is incorrect; it should be 'exploring'. 'Place' should be plural 'places'.

× To beach or eating something and the types of.

✓ to the beach or eating something, and the types of activities vary on my birthdays.

This fragment is incomplete and unclear. It needs to be connected properly to form a complete sentence.

× Activities will go in my birthdays.

✓ These are the types of activities I do on my birthdays.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning.

× Don't know what a big everyone think but.

✓ I don't know what everyone thinks, but

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Adding 'I' and correcting verb form improves clarity.

× From my perspective, it is crucial to celebrate my birthday because my friend and family are.

✓ From my perspective, it is crucial to celebrate my birthday because my friends and family are

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'family' and the plural verb 'are'.

× Excited like this birthday and we always stay together and give opportunity to each other.

✓ excited about this birthday, and we always stay together and give opportunities to each other.

'Like this birthday' is incorrect; 'about this birthday' is correct. 'Give opportunity' should be plural 'give opportunities'.

× That's it.

✓ That's it.

This sentence is acceptable as a concluding phrase.

× OK, one of my friends whose name is Rafaat older and he's incredibly good and Chinese speak.

✓ OK, one of my friends whose name is Rafaat is older, and he's incredibly good at speaking Chinese.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'Rafaat'. 'Chinese speak' should be 'speaking Chinese' with the preposition 'at'.

× And Chinese language and I think.

✓ He knows Chinese language, and I think

The sentence fragment is incomplete and needs to be connected properly.

× His birthday is important to celebrate in China.

✓ His birthday is important to celebrate in China.

This sentence is grammatically correct.

× Already he learned English.

✓ He has already learned English.

The sentence needs the auxiliary verb 'has' for present perfect tense and correct word order.

× And Chinese language, but he is very happy when he think that his birthday.

✓ and Chinese language, but he is very happy when he thinks about his birthday.

The verb 'think' should be 'thinks' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'. 'When he think that his birthday' is incomplete and unclear; 'when he thinks about his birthday' is correct.