Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit wordy and slightly repetitive. Make the response more concise, use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid phrases like "a bit" and unnecessary repetition of 'use'.

Ejemplo: I first encountered the internet at around six or seven, but I began using it regularly at age twelve when I needed it for school research. For example, I used online encyclopedias and library databases to find sources for my history projects.

Sugerencia: Good answer: direct, varied vocabulary, and specific activities. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid sounding formal and add a linking word to make it flow more naturally.

Ejemplo: I use the internet every day because it’s essential for work and personal life. For instance, I collaborate with colleagues on projects, buy household items online, and video-call family abroad.

Sugerencia: The idea is relevant, but the answer is unclear and ungrammatical. You need a clear topic sentence, specific details, correct tense and pronouns, and logical linking. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences) and state the reason and consequence clearly.

Ejemplo: Yes. In middle school my parents often banned me from using the internet because I ignored my homework to use social media. As a result, they restricted my access for a week until I improved my schoolwork.

Sugerencia: Your message is understandable but contains grammar errors and unclear phrases (e.g. 'implement mental health', 'certain social details'). Use clear cause-effect language and give a specific strategy and result. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I used to spend many hours on social media, which negatively affected my mental health. Therefore, I now limit myself to one hour a day online and use the extra time for reading and exercise.

Sugerencia: The answer is relevant but has some grammar mistakes and could be slightly expanded with clearer linking and one specific example of an offline activity. Use correct verb forms and a smoother consequence link.

Ejemplo: If there were no internet, I would be unable to access my cloud-based work files, so I would probably take a day or two off. During that time I would catch up on reading novels and plan tasks to do once I regain access.

× I was introduced to the Internet when I was 6 or 7, but I didn't really use it until I was 12 years old because I needed it to do a bit of research to complete my school homework.

✓ I was introduced to the Internet when I was six or seven, but I didn't really use it until I was twelve because I needed it to do a bit of research to complete my school homework.

Numbers under ten are normally written in words in formal writing; this is a style issue rather than a grammar error. The sentence's tense usage is correct (past simple). Suggestion: write small numbers as words in formal contexts and keep consistent number formatting.

× The Internet has become part of both my professional and personal life, so I use it every single day to collaborate with my colleagues, do online shopping and connect with my family and friends overseas.

✓ The Internet has become part of both my professional and personal life, so I use it every single day to collaborate with my colleagues, do online shopping, and connect with my family and friends overseas.

The original sentence is grammatically correct in tense and structure. The only improvement is punctuation: add a comma before the final item in the list (Oxford comma) for clarity. Suggestion: include the comma in lists to avoid ambiguity.

× Yes, I can remember many of such incidents when I was back in middle school. Perhaps for example, there was a time when I got to I did that to. All I would know was that I ignore all of my homework to so my parents have to step in.

✓ Yes, I can remember many such incidents from middle school. For example, there was a time when I did that; I ignored all my homework, so my parents had to step in.

Multiple sentence structure and tense errors: 'many of such incidents' is awkward; use 'many such incidents'. 'When I was back in middle school' is wordy; 'from middle school' is clearer. The clause 'there was a time when I got to I did that to' is ungrammatical and appears to be a jumble; replace with 'there was a time when I did that'. Use past simple consistently: 'I ignored' not 'I ignore', and 'my parents had to step in' for past obligation. Also punctuation: split into clearer sentences and use a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent (past simple for past events) and simplify phrasing.

× I used to spend many hours a day online, especially on social media, and it started to implement mental health and so now I'm on certain social details. I limit myself to one hour a day online so that I can spend more time with myself.

✓ I used to spend many hours a day online, especially on social media, and it started to affect my mental health, so now I'm more selective about social media. I limit myself to one hour a day online so that I can spend more time alone.

The original has incorrect verb choice 'implement' instead of 'affect' and awkward phrase 'I'm on certain social details.' Use 'started to affect my mental health' to describe impact. 'More selective about social media' clarifies behavior change. 'Spend more time with myself' is awkward in English; use 'spend more time alone' or 'take time for myself.' Maintain past simple for past habit and present simple for current routine. Suggestion: choose verbs that accurately express meaning and use natural English expressions for solitude.

× Most of my work files are stored digitally on the cloud, so if there were no Internet I would probably left without work. As a result, I would take a day or two off and enjoy myself reading.

✓ Most of my work files are stored digitally on the cloud, so if there were no internet I would probably be left without work. As a result, I would take a day or two off and enjoy reading.

Conditional structure: use 'would be left' (passive) rather than 'would probably left'. 'Internet' does not need to be capitalized here. 'Enjoy myself reading' is awkward; use 'enjoy reading' or 'enjoy myself by reading.' Suggestion: ensure correct passive construction with 'be' + past participle and use idiomatic phrasing for activities.