Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 주제 문장과 구체적인 세부사항을 포함하도록 연습하세요.

Ejemplo: I started using the internet when I was a couple of years old because I needed to search for information for my school assignments.

Sugerencia: 답변에 불필요한 중복과 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 더 논리적이고 자연스럽게 만들고, 구체적인 이유를 명확히 표현하세요.

Ejemplo: I often go online because my friends have an online community where we chat, and it also helps me find information to improve my knowledge.

Sugerencia: 문장이 불완전하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하도록 연습하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, when I was in middle school, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet much because they thought some students couldn't control their usage.

Sugerencia: 답변이 중복되고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 시간을 조절하는 방법에 대해 명확하고 간결하게 설명하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하세요.

Ejemplo: When I was younger, I spent too much time online because I couldn't control myself. However, now that I've grown up, I manage my online time well.

Sugerencia: 답변이 어색하고 문법 오류가 많으며, 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 인터넷 없이 하는 활동을 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Ejemplo: Without the internet, I would do my homework, listen to music, and read books because these activities are comfortable for me.

× I started using the Internet when I was. TER. Couple years old because we have many assignment in school so I searched the the information in Internet in the Internet.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a couple of years old because we had many assignments in school, so I searched for the information on the Internet.

The sentence contains past tense errors: 'have' should be 'had' to match past time, 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments', and 'searched the the information in Internet in the Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'searched for the information on the Internet'. Also, 'a couple years old' needs the article 'a' and 'couple of years' is the correct phrase.

× I searched the the information in Internet in the Internet.

✓ I searched for the information on the Internet.

The verb 'search' is usually followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating what is being searched. Also, the correct preposition for using the Internet is 'on' not 'in'.

× So I used that used to do that.

✓ So I used to do that.

The phrase 'used that used to do that' is redundant and incorrect. The correct expression is 'used to do that' to indicate a past habit.

× I often go online because my friends have online community, so uh, to talk with them, I uh, have to go online and going online give many information to improve my knowledge.

✓ I often go online because my friends have an online community, so to talk with them, I have to go online and going online gives me a lot of information to improve my knowledge.

'Have online community' needs an article 'an' before 'online community'. 'Going online give' should be 'going online gives' to agree with singular subject. Also, 'many information' is incorrect; 'a lot of information' or 'much information' is correct.

× my friends have online community

✓ my friends have an online community

The noun 'community' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'an' before it.

× going online give many information

✓ going online gives a lot of information

The subject 'going online' is singular, so the verb should be 'gives' not 'give'. Also, 'many information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable; use 'a lot of information'.

× Yes, particularly when I was middle school student.

✓ Yes, particularly when I was a middle school student.

The phrase 'middle school student' is singular and countable, so it requires the article 'a'. The tense 'was' is correct here.

× My parents don't want to use the Internet a lot because some middle school students didn't have to. Control themselves.

✓ My parents didn't want me to use the Internet a lot because some middle school students couldn't control themselves.

'Don't want to use' should be past tense 'didn't want me to use' to match the past context. 'Didn't have to control themselves' is incorrect; it should be 'couldn't control themselves' to express inability.

× When I was young, I spent too much time online because I don't have control myself.

✓ When I was young, I spent too much time online because I didn't have control over myself.

The sentence is about past time, so 'don't have' should be 'didn't have'. Also, 'control myself' needs the preposition 'over' to be correct.

× But I I've grown up, I can control it by myself.

✓ But now that I've grown up, I can control it by myself.

The phrase 'I I've grown up' is redundant; 'now that I've grown up' is clearer. The tense is present perfect, which is appropriate here.

× So I don't. I managed, I manage. I manage it myself.

✓ So I manage it myself.

The sentence is fragmented and confusing. The correct present tense is 'I manage it myself'.

× Sometimes either my homework or listen to music, because that is very comfortable activity to me, especially without the Internet.

✓ Sometimes I do my homework or listen to music because those are very comfortable activities for me, especially without the Internet.

The word 'either' is incorrectly used here; it should be omitted. Also, 'that is very comfortable activity' should be plural 'those are very comfortable activities' to match the plural subjects. 'To me' should be 'for me'.

× And sometimes I reading, sometimes I read the books.

✓ And sometimes I read, sometimes I read books.

'I reading' is incorrect; it should be 'I read'. Also, 'the books' is too general; 'books' without 'the' is better here.