Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repeating 'Internet' unnecessarily and improve sentence structure for natural flow.

Ejemplo: I started using the internet when I was about five years old because it helped me complete my schoolwork more easily and conveniently.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, try to avoid repeating 'Internet' and 'regularly' closely. Provide a clear topic sentence and then explain with specific reasons.

Ejemplo: I go online every day because I use a trading app to invest in stocks, so it's important for me to check the market regularly.

Sugerencia: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about why you didn't use the internet and what you did instead.

Ejemplo: Yes, last Friday when I went to the library, I didn't use my phone or the internet because I was reading an interesting story about Amritsar 1984.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar. Also, specify the time more clearly and avoid awkward phrases like 'watch the mobile'.

Ejemplo: I don't spend too much time online because I have eyesight problems, so I usually use my phone for only one or two hours a day.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples using linking words. Also, correct grammar and avoid repeating 'read' and 'book' closely.

Ejemplo: Without the internet, I would spend more time with my family and friends. For example, last Friday, I enjoyed reading a book called Amritsar 1984 by Chopra.

× Well, Internet is very popular in my nation and I usually start Internet at the age of 5 because I do my school work or on Internet.

✓ Well, the Internet is very popular in my nation and I usually started using the Internet at the age of 5 because I do my school work on the Internet.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the global network. Also, 'start Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'started using the Internet' to indicate beginning an activity. The verb tense 'start' should be past tense 'started' to match 'at the age of 5'. Additionally, 'do my school work or on Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'do my school work on the Internet' to use the correct preposition and article.

× So I like to use Internet to complete my work easily and convenient.

✓ So I like to use the Internet to complete my work easily and conveniently.

Again, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'convenient' is an adjective but should be an adverb 'conveniently' to modify the verb 'complete'.

× Well, I use the Internet regularly because I invest my money in trading app and purchase the shares.

✓ Well, I use the Internet regularly because I invest my money in a trading app and purchase shares.

The phrase 'trading app' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun mentioned for the first time. Also, 'the shares' is incorrect unless referring to specific shares; 'shares' without 'the' is more general and appropriate here.

× Yes, last Friday when I went to library then I I don't use my mobile and Internet because I read these stories very interesting.

✓ Yes, last Friday when I went to the library, I didn't use my mobile or the Internet because I was reading some very interesting stories.

'Went to library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library'. 'I don't use' should be past tense 'I didn't use' to match the past time 'last Friday'. 'Mobile and Internet' should be 'mobile or the Internet' for clarity. 'I read these stories very interesting' is incorrect; it should be 'I was reading some very interesting stories' to use past continuous tense and correct sentence structure.

× And in the library I read the story about Amritsar 1984.

✓ And in the library, I read a story about Amritsar 1984.

'The story' implies a specific story known to the listener, but here it is likely an unspecified story, so 'a story' is appropriate.

× It is not possible for me to watch the mobile or Internet for a long time because I have eyesight problem.

✓ It is not possible for me to look at my mobile or the Internet for a long time because I have an eyesight problem.

'Watch the mobile or Internet' is incorrect; we 'look at' screens or devices. Also, 'eyesight problem' needs the indefinite article 'an' before it.

× Due to this I watch the mobile only for one or two hour.

✓ Due to this, I watch my mobile only for one or two hours.

'Watch the mobile' should be 'watch my mobile' to indicate possession. 'One or two hour' should be plural 'hours' because it refers to more than one hour.

× Well, I do different activity without Internet like spending time with my family and reading books and last Friday I spend my free time with my friends and read the book and I read Amritsar 1984 book written by Chopra.

✓ Well, I do different activities without the Internet like spending time with my family and reading books. Last Friday, I spent my free time with my friends and read a book called Amritsar 1984 written by Chopra.

'Different activity' should be plural 'different activities' because it refers to multiple activities. 'Without Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Last Friday I spend' should be past tense 'I spent' to match the time. 'Read the book' should be 'read a book' unless a specific book was previously mentioned. The sentence was long and run-on; splitting into two sentences improves clarity.