Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as tense inconsistency ('start' should be 'started'). The sentence is also too long and slightly redundant. Try to give a direct answer first, then add a brief, relevant detail using linking words to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: I started using the Internet when I was about 10 years old. At that time, it was already popular among people of all ages, which made it an important part of daily life.

Sugerencia: Your answer is too long and contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Avoid starting with 'But' and use linking words to connect ideas clearly. Also, be concise and avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: I go online every day, usually for about five hours. I use the Internet mainly to learn new things, such as computer science and mathematics courses.

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but you could improve coherence by using more varied linking words and slightly more natural phrasing.

Ejemplo: Yes, I remember a time when I spent too many hours online, sometimes up to six hours without breaks. Therefore, my parents asked me to stop using the Internet for a few days because they were concerned about my health and studies. Although it was difficult at first, I realised it helped me focus better and rest my eyes.

Sugerencia: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors and unclear ideas. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons, using correct grammar and linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially at night. For example, I use social media for about five hours every day, which can strain my eyes and affect my health, so I want to reduce this habit.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific supporting details with correct grammar and linking words to make your response coherent.

Ejemplo: If I didn't have the Internet, I would spend more time exercising. For instance, I enjoy going to the gym because it makes me happier and helps me build muscle through activities like pull-ups and weight training.

× I start using the Internet when I was about 10 years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was about 10 years old.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the time frame.

× ...and even yet at the elderly people, which made it an essential part of the life world.

✓ ...and even the elderly people, which made it an essential part of life.

The phrase 'even yet at the elderly people' is incorrect. 'Even the elderly people' is correct, and 'part of the life world' is unnatural; 'part of life' is the correct expression.

× But I always go online like seven days a week and I will spend around 5 hours every day because I think in the Internet there are many information I can learn and there are many courses like computer science courses or mathematics courses and I can learn many knowledge I have.

✓ I always go online seven days a week and spend around 5 hours every day because I think there is a lot of information on the Internet that I can learn, including many courses like computer science or mathematics, and I can gain a lot of knowledge.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect article and quantifier usage. 'Will spend' should be 'spend' to match habitual action. 'Many information' is incorrect; 'a lot of information' is correct because 'information' is uncountable. 'Many knowledge' is incorrect; 'a lot of knowledge' is correct.

× I play around 5 hours everyday in social media and this is not unhealthy for me because my eyes may have some suffering from some disease after long time playing on social medias, so I don't like this.

✓ I spend around 5 hours every day on social media and this is unhealthy for me because my eyes may suffer from some disease after a long time playing on social media, so I don't like this.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'on social media' is correct. 'May have some suffering from some disease' is awkward; 'may suffer from some disease' is correct. 'Social medias' should be singular 'social media' as it is uncountable.

× I would just doing some exercise like besides from using the Internet going gym is one of the my biggest habit because you can be happier and from what you gain like you can gain some muscle by do doing some pull up or changing your bicep or something.

✓ I would just do some exercise; besides using the Internet, going to the gym is one of my biggest habits because you can be happier and gain muscle by doing pull-ups or working on your biceps or something similar.

'Would just doing' is incorrect; it should be 'would just do'. 'Besides from' is incorrect; 'besides' or 'apart from' is correct. 'Going gym' should be 'going to the gym'. 'One of the my biggest habit' should be 'one of my biggest habits'. 'Do doing' is incorrect; 'doing' is correct. 'Changing your bicep' is awkward; 'working on your biceps' is better.