Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammatical accuracy by using the correct tense and article usage. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points with linking words. For example, say "I started using the Internet when I was around eight or nine years old. At first, it was just for games, but now I use it for everything, such as social media."

Ejemplo: I started using the Internet when I was about eight or nine years old. Initially, I used it mainly for playing games; however, now I use it for various purposes, including social media and learning.

Sugerencia: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correct minor grammatical errors. For example, say "I go online many times a day, probably too often. Whether I am checking e-mails, studying, or just watching YouTube videos and scrolling through Instagram, I'm always connected."

Ejemplo: I go online many times a day, probably too often. Whether I am checking emails, studying, or just watching YouTube videos and scrolling through Instagram, I am always connected.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary for clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons. For example, "Yes, I remember a time during my childhood when I was not allowed to use the Internet because my parents were concerned about screen time. They believed excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies."

Ejemplo: Yes, I remember a time during my childhood when I was not allowed to use the Internet because my parents were concerned about screen time. They believed that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

Sugerencia: Use plural forms and linking words for better flow. For example, "Yes, I do. Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching videos or scrolling through social media."

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching videos or scrolling through social media.

Sugerencia: Use more natural expressions and linking words. For example, "Honestly, I would probably feel lost without the Internet because I rely on it for everything, including communication, entertainment, and even shopping for groceries."

Ejemplo: Honestly, I would probably feel lost without the Internet because I rely on it for everything, including communication, entertainment, and even shopping for groceries.

× I'm starting using the Internet when I was around 8:00 or nine years old.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was around eight or nine years old.

The phrase 'I'm starting using' is incorrect because 'start' should be followed by either the infinitive form 'to use' or the gerund 'using', but not combined as 'starting using'. Also, the present continuous 'I'm starting' does not fit with the past time reference 'when I was around eight or nine years old'. The correct form is simple past 'I started using'. Additionally, '8:00 or nine years old' is inconsistent; it should be 'eight or nine years old'.

× At first it was just for game, but now it's everything.

✓ At first it was just for games, but now it's everything.

The word 'game' should be plural 'games' because it refers to multiple instances or types of games in general. Using singular 'game' here is incorrect as it implies only one game, which is unlikely in this context.

× I go online many times a day, probably too often.

✓ I go online many times a day, probably too often.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× Whether it is checking e-mail, study or just watching YouTube events, scrolling on Instagram, I'm always connected.

✓ Whether it is checking e-mail, studying or just watching YouTube videos, scrolling through Instagram, I'm always connected.

The verb 'study' should be in gerund form 'studying' to match the parallel structure with 'checking' and 'watching'. Also, 'scrolling on Instagram' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'scrolling through Instagram'. Additionally, 'YouTube events' is unusual; 'YouTube videos' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I can recall time during my childhood when I was not allowed to use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I can recall a time during my childhood when I was not allowed to use the Internet.

The noun 'time' here needs an article 'a' to indicate a specific instance. Without the article, the sentence is incomplete or incorrect.

× My parents were quite stressed about the screen time and believed that excellent Internet use could distract me from my study.

✓ My parents were quite stressed about the screen time and believed that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

The adjective 'excellent' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'too much' or 'excessive' Internet use. Also, 'study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to academic work in general.

× Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching video or scrolling throughout social media.

✓ Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching videos or scrolling through social media.

The word 'video' should be plural 'videos' because it refers to multiple videos. Also, the preposition 'throughout' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'through' when referring to browsing social media.

× Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching video or scrolling throughout social media.

✓ Sometimes I spend hours online without realizing it, especially when I'm watching videos or scrolling through social media.

The preposition 'throughout' is incorrect in this context; 'scrolling through social media' is the correct phrase to indicate browsing content.

× Honestly, I probably feel lost without air.

✓ Honestly, I would probably feel lost without it.

The pronoun 'air' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'without the Internet'. Using 'air' is a mistake. Also, 'feel' should be in conditional form 'would feel' to match the hypothetical situation.

× I rely on the Internet for everything, for communication, entertainment, and even groceries.

✓ I rely on the Internet for everything: communication, entertainment, and even groceries.

The sentence is mostly correct, but the phrase 'for communication, entertainment, and even groceries' is better introduced with a colon rather than 'for' repeated. This improves clarity and style.