Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms and remove filler words (uh).

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought me a small pink bike with training wheels, and I used it mainly for practicing in the park rather than for going places.

Sugerencia: Clarify your points and use correct vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid unclear terms and pronunciation errors; name the system correctly or describe it generally if unsure.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, the bike-sharing system introduced in many cities makes cycling convenient, so people often ride to school or use bikes when public transport is suspended.

× My daddy bought me one and it was pink and had a small wheels had small wheels uh.

✓ My daddy bought me one; it was pink and had small wheels.

The sentence contains redundancy and an incorrect noun phrase: 'had a small wheels' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'wheels'. Use either singular ('a small wheel') or plural without 'a' ('small wheels'). Also remove duplicate fragment 'had small wheels' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: keep agreement between article and noun and avoid repeated clauses.

× I didn't use it when going somewhere, but I just practiced writing it uh when I uh to ride when I.

✓ I didn't use it to go anywhere; I only practiced riding it.

This sentence is ungrammatical and contains fragments and incorrect verbs: 'when going somewhere' is awkward and 'practiced writing it' is incorrect for riding a bike. Also 'when I uh to ride when I' is a fragment. Correct structure: use 'didn't use it to go anywhere' and 'practiced riding it'. Keep verb forms simple and remove filler words.

× Yes, I think they are popular since Totaruni system had introduced insole.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular since the Totaruni system was introduced.

This sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect passive construction 'had introduced insole'. Use past simple passive 'was introduced' to indicate a past event that explains current popularity. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'Totaruni system'. Remove 'insole' which seems wrong or misplaced unless a different word was intended.

× People use it to ride to school or when they there are when the Tran public transit is stopped.

✓ People use them to ride to school, or when the public transit is stopped.

Problems: pronoun agreement and word order. 'People use it' should be 'use them' (bikes plural) — this is a pronoun/number agreement but corrected here with plural. Remove redundant fragments 'when they there are when'. Use clear clause 'when the public transit is stopped' or better 'when public transit is disrupted'. Ensure subject and pronoun number match and remove duplicated words.