Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar; begin with a clear topic sentence, use one or two linking words, and add a brief specific detail (e.g., age learned or how you felt). Avoid repeating the same idea and fix tense consistency (use past tense). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. My first bike was a hand-me-down from my elder cousin, and I learned to ride it when I was about seven. It was a simple, red bicycle, and later I passed it on to my younger cousin when I outgrew it.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Correct phrasing (say "popular among"), and avoid redundancy like "not bike friendly as well as walking friendly"—choose one clear point. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are popular among children, but not so much among adults. This is because the roads in my city are car-centric and lack safe cycling lanes, so most people prefer cars or public transport.

× My first bike was passed on by my elder cousin to me and I was able to learn how to ride a bike using that bike and eventually when I got older, it gets passed on again to my younger cousin and the cycle goes on until the very last cousin obtained the bike.

✓ My first bike was passed on to me by my elder cousin, and I learned to ride it using that bike. Eventually, when I got older, it was passed on again to my younger cousin, and the cycle continued until the last cousin obtained the bike.

The original sentence mixes past tense forms incorrectly: 'was passed on' and 'I was able to learn' are past, but 'it gets passed on again' uses present tense, creating inconsistency. Also 'learn how to ride a bike using that bike' is wordy and repetitive. Use consistent past tense for a sequence of past events and simplify phrasing (learned to ride it). Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation to improve clarity.

× I do, especially to younger children, but eventually as you grow up you do not consider the bike as a main mode of transportation since most of the roads here are car centric and not that bike friendly as well as walking friendly.

✓ I do, especially among younger children, but as you grow up you do not consider the bike a main mode of transportation because most roads here are car-centric and not very bike- or pedestrian-friendly.

The sentence uses present simple generally, which is fine, but contains awkward prepositions and modifiers ('to younger children', 'consider the bike as a main mode', 'not that bike friendly as well as walking friendly'). These are issues of word choice and collocation rather than tense. Replace 'to' with 'among', remove unnecessary 'as', use 'because' for cause, hyphenate 'car-centric', and use 'bike- or pedestrian-friendly' for clarity and idiomatic expression.