Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incorrect phrases ("walk on by my feet").

Ejemplo: No, I didn't. In my family girls were not allowed to ride bikes, so I never had one. Also, my school was very close to home, so it was easy for me to walk there every day.

Sugerencia: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear statement, then give specific supporting details and use linking words. Remove confusing or incorrect phrases (e.g. "my salary popular", "buy drugs", "bipartisan"). Explain cultural reasons succinctly and correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country; many households own at least one. However, they are more commonly used by boys because traditional cultural norms discourage girls from cycling.

× In my country, almost every house had a household owns their own bikes.

✓ In my country, almost every household owns its own bike.

The sentence has multiple problems: subject-verb agreement and word choice. 'Household' is the correct singular noun; use 'owns' for third person singular (verb agreement). Use the singular 'its' to agree with 'household' and 'bike' for clarity. Also 'had' (past) conflicts with general statement about current popularity, so present tense 'owns' is appropriate.

× girls were not allowed to ride bike.

✓ girls were not allowed to ride bikes.

Countable noun 'bike' should be plural when referring generally to girls riding bicycles. Use 'bikes' for a general plural reference.

× And the other, another reason the school is very close to my home.

✓ Another reason is that the school was very close to my home.

The original lacks a main verb and has redundant words ('the other, another'). Add 'Another reason is that' and match tense to the past context ('was'). This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× that's why it was, uh, very easy for me to walk and fit.

✓ That's why it was very easy for me to walk there.

The phrase 'walk and fit' is incorrect and unclear. Use the preposition 'there' to indicate destination. Remove 'fit' which is inappropriate here.

× walk on by my feet.

✓ walk by myself.

'Walk on by my feet' is unidiomatic. Use the reflexive/appropriate phrase 'walk by myself' or 'walk on foot' if emphasizing means. 'By my feet' is incorrect pronoun/object usage.

× Yes, my salary popular.

✓ Yes, they are popular.

The original is incoherent. The question asks whether bikes are popular; respond 'Yes, they are popular.' 'My salary popular' is unrelated and lacks verb and correct subject. Use plural pronoun 'they' referring to bikes.

× However, bikes are more popular among boys than girls.

✓ However, bikes are more popular among boys than among girls.

Comparative structure is clearer with parallel prepositional phrases: 'among boys than among girls.' It ensures balanced comparison.

× Because our social and cultural values didn't allow because our social and cultural value are not allowed to buy drugs.

✓ Because our social and cultural values do not allow girls to buy bikes.

The original repeats and incorrectly refers to 'buy drugs' which is likely a mistake. Use 'do not allow' (present tense for general statement) and correctly specify the object 'girls to buy bikes.' Fix pronoun/subject agreement: 'values do not allow' instead of 'value are not allowed.'

× Mostly boys use bipartisan.

✓ Mostly boys use bicycles.

'Bipartisan' is the wrong word. The correct noun is 'bicycles.' The sentence needs this lexical correction to make sense.