Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and possessive grammar, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (e.g., because, so, but). Be specific about timing and actions. For example, correct tense usage: "I didn't have a bike" (simple past) and "I bought a scooter" (simple past). Replace unclear phrases like "not great for a girl to to draw, to drive a bike" with "my father thought it wasn't appropriate for a girl to ride a bike."

Ejemplo: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my father thought it wasn't appropriate for a girl to ride one. However, when I grew up I bought a scooter last year so I could travel more independently.

Sugerencia: Work on clarity, coherence and specific supporting details. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your view, then use linking words (for example, because, however, so) to add reasons with concrete examples. Correct grammar (e.g., "prefer to take public transport" and "there are few good roads"). Avoid contradictory or vague statements like "we don't have any possibilities to buy a bike." If availability is an issue, specify why (cost, shops, imports).

Ejemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer cars or public transport. For instance, roads are often crowded and unsafe for cyclists, and bike shops are scarce, so fewer people choose to buy and ride bicycles.

× When I was child, I didn't have a bike because my father's think that it's not great for a girl to to draw, to drive a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike because my father thought that it wasn't appropriate for a girl to ride a bike.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'child' (Article errors but handled as sentence structure), incorrect possessive 'my father's' used as subject and wrong verb form 'think' should be past 'thought' (Past tense issue), repeated 'to' and wrong verb 'draw' instead of 'ride' (word choice), and 'drive a bike' is unnatural; use 'ride a bike'. Suggestion: include articles, match verb tense to 'was' (use past tense), use correct verbs ('thought', 'ride'), and avoid duplicate 'to'.

× But when I became an adult, I buy my own scooter.

✓ But when I became an adult, I bought my own scooter.

The time marker 'became' is past, so the verb 'buy' must be in past tense 'bought' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past events.

× In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country because some people have their own car and prefer take the public transport than have a bike because it's so dangerous.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country because some people have their own cars and prefer to take public transport rather than have a bike because it is too dangerous.

Multiple issues: 'car' should be plural 'cars' to match 'some people' (Singular and plural issue), missing 'to' after 'prefer' (Verb + -ing form / infinitive usage), 'the public transport' should be 'public transport' (Incorrect use of the definite article), 'than' should be 'rather than' for contrast, and 'it's so dangerous' more naturally 'it is too dangerous'. Suggestion: pluralize nouns to match subjects, use 'prefer to do' or 'prefer doing', remove unnecessary articles, and use 'rather than' for contrasts.

× We don't have many roads and we don't have any possibilities to buy a bike.

✓ We don't have many roads and we don't have any opportunity to buy a bike.

'Possibilities' is unnatural here; use 'opportunities' or 'opportunity'. Also 'any possibilities to buy a bike' is awkward—use 'opportunity to buy a bike'. Suggestion: choose the appropriate noun ('opportunity' or 'opportunities') and keep number agreement with context.