Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary repetition, and correct mistakes (university name and tense). Use one or two supporting details (year and major).

Ejemplo: I'm a student. I'm a senior at Kunming University in Seoul, and I major in classical music composition.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer first, then one or two clear details. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles, and proper noun capitalization) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like "Also" or "Usually" to connect details.

Ejemplo: I study at Kunming University in Seoul. I usually study in the Song Library on campus because it has quiet study areas.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and provide specific reasons using correct grammar. Use linking phrases like "because" and correct countable nouns (many desks, comfortable chairs). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's an excellent place to study because it's very quiet and comfortable. The library has many desks and comfortable chairs, which helps me concentrate.

Sugerencia: Give a clear yes/no and then one reason. Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow. Correct phrasing ("snug" is fine but be natural) and use a linking word like "because" or "however" if suggesting a small change.

Ejemplo: Not really, because the library is comfortable and has many cushions. If I had to suggest one change, I would ask for more power outlets near the study tables.

Sugerencia: Use natural phrasing for future plans and parallel structure. Be specific about the program and career goal, and avoid unclear acronyms (explain AMR). Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words like "and" or "so" for cohesion.

Ejemplo: I plan to pursue a master's degree in the UK to study composition more deeply. I hope to become an expert in the music industry and eventually work in A&R at SM Entertainment, helping develop new artists.

× I'm a student, more specifically I'm a senior at Cummin University in Seoul. So are we graduate soon and I'm majoring in classical music composition.

✓ I'm a student; more specifically, I'm a senior at Kunming University in Seoul. So we will graduate soon, and I'm majoring in classical music composition.

Pronoun 'we' was used correctly but sentence structure was incorrect; 'are we graduate soon' is ungrammatical. Use future construction 'we will graduate soon' to express upcoming event. Also corrected university name spelling and punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'we will' or 'we're going to' for planned future events.

× That is because my school library has a lots of desk and cozy chair, so it is really good place.

✓ That is because my school library has a lot of desks and cozy chairs, so it is a really good place.

'a lots of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' or simply 'lots of'. Nouns 'desk' and 'chair' must be plural after a quantifier. Also 'good place' needs the article 'a'. Suggestion: match quantifier with plural nouns and include appropriate articles.

× And I'm usually study in the school library called song library.

✓ And I usually study in the school library called the Song Library.

Auxiliary 'am' plus base verb 'study' is incorrect. Use simple present 'I usually study' to describe habitual actions. Also add the definite article 'the' before the library name and capitalize the name. Suggestion: For habits, use simple present without 'be' auxiliary.

× Absolutely yes. It is really quiet and cozy place.

✓ Absolutely, yes. It is a really quiet and cozy place.

Missing article 'a' before 'really quiet and cozy place'. Also 'really' modifies adjectives, placement is fine. Suggestion: Include articles for singular countable nouns.

× Not really because my library is really comfortable and snug place and it has a lot of cushions.

✓ Not really, because my library is a really comfortable and snug place, and it has a lot of cushions.

Missing article 'a' before 'really comfortable and snug place'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns and insert commas to separate clauses.

× It is so it is really cool and cozy.

✓ It is really cool and cozy.

Redundant phrase 'so it is' creates repetition and is ungrammatical in this context. Simplify to one clause. Suggestion: Avoid unnecessary repetition; use one clear descriptive clause.

× I plan to go to Master's degree in the UK.

✓ I plan to do a Master's degree in the UK.

Incorrect verb and article use: 'go to Master's degree' is ungrammatical. Use 'do a Master's degree' or 'pursue a Master's degree'. Include the article 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'do/pursue/earn a Master's degree' for study plans.

× I want to study my major more deeply and I wish to become an expert in music industry and also I want to work in AMR at SM Entertainment.

✓ I want to study my major more deeply, and I wish to become an expert in the music industry. I also want to work in A&R at SM Entertainment.

Missing article 'the' before 'music industry' and punctuation to separate ideas. 'AMR' is likely a typo for 'A&R' (artists and repertoire) in the music industry. Use commas and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'the music industry' and ensure correct acronyms; use commas to separate clauses.