Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and organize it: start with a clear topic sentence (I am a student), then add one or two supporting details. Avoid redundancy and fix grammar (e.g., "I have just completed..." and "I attend coaching classes"). Use linking words like "and" or "also" briefly.

Ejemplo: I am a student. I have just completed a bachelor's degree in economics and plan to go abroad for my master's. I also attend coaching classes for the HAS exam to prepare for competitive entry.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear statement of the place, then add one or two specific details. Use correct grammar for distance and commuting (e.g., "45 kilometres away"). Replace vague phrases like "learn various things" with concrete information (e.g., courses or facilities).

Ejemplo: I study at a learning centre in the city centre, about 45 kilometres from my home. Because of the long commute I find traveling back and forth tiring, but the centre offers several practical courses I need for my degree.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and give two specific supporting reasons. Use correct phrasing for facilities (e.g., "the library is open 24 hours"). Avoid unclear phrases like "adapt various skill"; instead mention which skills can be developed.

Ejemplo: Yes, it is. The centre has a quiet, comfortable atmosphere ideal for studying, and the library is open 24 hours, which helps me study late and improve my research and writing skills.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence saying whether you'd like changes, then list one or two specific changes with brief reasons. Use correct vocabulary (avoid "addiction"; use "additions" or "improvements") and grammar ("a bigger library").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like a few improvements. For example, adding more technical classes would help students gain practical skills, and expanding the library or creating a small garden would make the campus more pleasant and provide better study spaces.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly: state your main plan, then give one or two specific steps or reasons. Correct grammar and word choice ("master's degree," "an economist," "a reputable Bank of Canada—better: a reputable bank in Canada"). Avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I plan to pass my exams and pursue a master's degree in economics abroad. After graduating, I hope to work as an economist at a reputable bank in Canada to gain international experience and build my career.

× I'm a student, I have just completed my bachelor's degree in economics and now I wish to go abroad for my further studies.

✓ I'm a student. I have just completed my bachelor's degree in economics, and now I wish to go abroad for further studies.

Two independent clauses were joined with a comma creating a comma splice; use a period or semicolon. 'Further studies' is the usual collocation without 'my'. Also add a comma before 'and' connecting independent clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Moreover, I go for the coaching classes for the HAS exam.

✓ Moreover, I attend coaching classes for the HAS exam.

Use 'attend' instead of 'go for' to sound natural and grammatically correct; 'go for the coaching classes' is awkward. This corrects verb choice and form. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Actually I'm studying at city centre, which far from my home, 45 kilometres, and it's really challenging for me to up and down regularly.

✓ Actually, I'm studying at the city centre, which is 45 kilometres from my home, and it's really challenging for me to travel there and back regularly.

Missing comma after 'Actually'. Use definite article 'the city centre'. 'Which far from my home' lacks verb 'is' and wrong word order; include distance before 'from my home'. 'Up and down' is informal and unclear; use 'travel there and back'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× So that's the place I go to learn various things.

✓ So that's the place where I go to learn various things.

Add 'where' to connect the clause properly; 'that's the place I go to' is informal but adding 'where' improves grammar and clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Of course, it's a quiet and cozy atmosphere.

✓ Of course, it has a quiet and cozy atmosphere.

'It's a quiet and cozy atmosphere' is awkward because 'it' (the place) cannot 'be' an atmosphere; better to say 'it has a quiet and cozy atmosphere' or 'it's quiet and cozy'. Adjusts article and verb usage. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× Moreover, the library facility always available, which opened 24 hours, so it's a good opportunity to adapt various skill in one place.

✓ Moreover, the library is always available and open 24 hours, so it's a good opportunity to develop various skills in one place.

Missing verb 'is' after 'library'. Use 'open 24 hours' not 'which opened 24 hours'. 'Adapt various skill' is incorrect; use 'develop various skills' and plural 'skills'. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Actually little bit I consider about some new addiction in the campus site, like more technical classes as well as garden.

✓ Actually, I would like to suggest a few additions to the campus, such as more technical classes and a garden.

Sentence is ungrammatical and word choice is wrong: 'little bit I consider about' is awkward and 'addiction' is incorrect — should be 'additions'. Rephrase to 'I would like to suggest a few additions' which is natural and grammatically correct. Grammar problem type ID: 15

× Furthermore the library size more.

✓ Furthermore, the library should be larger.

Original lacks verb and uses odd word order. Use modal 'should' to suggest improvement and 'larger' as comparative adjective. Also add comma after 'Furthermore'. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× I hope I will pass my exams and go abroad to pursue my my master's degree in economics.

✓ I hope I will pass my exams and go abroad to pursue my master's degree in Economics.

Duplicate 'my my' removed. Capitalize 'Economics' as a field of study is optional but acceptable; the tense 'I hope I will' is acceptable though 'I hope to pass' is more natural. Kept future intention consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× After that, I want to become a economist in reputated Bank of Canada.

✓ After that, I want to become an economist at a reputable bank in Canada.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an economist'. 'Reputated' is incorrect; use 'reputable'. Use 'at a ... bank in Canada' rather than 'in reputated Bank of Canada' unless referring to a named bank (then 'the Bank of Canada' is different). Adjust article use accordingly. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× So it's my future plan and goal.

✓ So that's my future plan and goal.

Use 'that's' or 'that is' instead of 'it's' to refer back to the statement about plans; 'it's' can be ambiguous. Minor pronoun reference clarity improvement. Grammar problem type ID: 26