Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, use clear sentence structure and correct institution name; include a topic sentence then one supporting detail. Avoid repetition. Also correct grammar: use "in my second year" and "majoring in History."

Ejemplo: I'm a student. I'm in my second year, majoring in History at Molly Bajaj Women's College.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a topic sentence, correct prepositions, and one clear detail about location. Avoid repeating "university" and check name spelling. Use linking word if adding detail.

Ejemplo: I study at Molly Bajaj Women's College, which is located in my hometown.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, also). Use correct adjectives and grammar: "quiet," "students," and avoid vague phrases like "study related."

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a good place to study because the campus is quiet and the students are very friendly, which helps me concentrate.

Sugerencia: Give a direct yes/no then one clear reason. Avoid hesitations and repetition; correct grammar (e.g., "The teachers are experienced and good at teaching"). Keep to one or two concise sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't like any changes because the university is well-known and the teachers are experienced and effective at teaching.

Sugerencia: State plans clearly and use correct verbs: "go abroad" and "apply to" or "attend." Give one specific detail (when or which course). Remove hesitations and repetition.

Ejemplo: I plan to go abroad in July and apply to Oxford University to continue my studies, hopefully in a master's program in History.

× I'm a student, I'm studying in the second year of honors and my subject name is history and my college name is Molly Bajaj Women's Golf College.

✓ I'm a student. I'm studying in the second year of an honors program and my subject is history. My college's name is Molly Bajaj Women's College.

Original sentence has run-on structure and plural/singular issues: 'honors' should be 'an honors program' (count noun) and 'my subject name is' is unnatural — use 'my subject is'. Also 'Women's Golf College' likely incorrect; corrected to 'Women's College' unless 'Golf' was intended. Improve by splitting into short sentences and using appropriate articles.

× I study in the university and my university name is Mole Bajar Women's Golf College. It's located my hometown.

✓ I study at the university, and my university's name is Mole Bajar Women's College. It's located in my hometown.

Use 'study at the university' not 'study in the university'. Possessive form 'university's name' is natural. Add preposition 'in' for 'located in my hometown'.

× Yes, my hometown is very silent place. Also the pupils are very kind then that's why my college is very best for the study related.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a very quiet place. Also, the students are very kind, so my college is excellent for studying.

'Silent' is usually used for objects; 'quiet' is better for places. Missing article 'a' before 'very quiet place'. 'Pupils' is acceptable but 'students' fits college context. 'Very best' and 'for the study related' are ungrammatical — use 'excellent for studying' or 'very good for studies' and connect ideas with 'so'.

× Of course not because my university already very famous or it has or a many experienced or, uh, lots of experience.

✓ Of course not, because my university is already very famous and has many experienced faculty with lots of experience.

Missing verb 'is' after 'university'. Replace 'or' with 'and'. 'a many experienced' is ungrammatical — use 'many experienced faculty' or 'many experienced teachers'. Clarify subject and use proper connectors.

× Also that teachers are very, uh, experienced and their learner is their learner skills are good.

✓ Also, the teachers are very experienced and their teaching and learning skills are good.

Original has pronoun/confusing phrase 'their learner is their learner skills' which is ungrammatical. Use 'their teaching and learning skills' or 'they have good teaching skills' to convey meaning. Ensure consistent noun phrases.

× That's why I would like to I wouldn't.

✓ That's why I wouldn't want any changes.

Original is contradictory and ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is refusal of changes. Use clear structure: 'I wouldn't want any changes' or 'I would not like any changes'.

× My future study, planned, uh, in July, will go die abroad and uh, I, uh, I will admit the university, Oxford University, it's my future plan.

✓ As for my future studies, I plan to go abroad in July and apply to Oxford University.

Original mixes incorrect verbs: 'will go die abroad' is nonsensical; 'will admit the university' is wrong — a student applies to or will be admitted to a university. Use 'plan to go abroad' and 'apply to Oxford University' or 'I hope to be admitted to Oxford University'. Maintain future intention with 'plan to' or 'intend to'.