Study— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. However, you could make it more natural and informative by adding a little more detail about your studies or interests to enrich the response.

Ejemplo: Currently, I'm a high school student in Hong Kong, focusing on science subjects because I hope to pursue medicine in the future.

Sugerencia: Your answer contains some hesitations and unclear parts, which affects clarity. Try to speak more fluently and organise your answer logically, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: I've always studied in all-girls schools. Currently, I attend a high school in Causeway Bay, having recently transferred from another school called Antwi Food, which was closer to my home.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words and correct grammar.

Ejemplo: Yes, it's a great place to study because the environment is very studious. Moreover, my classmates are both academically and extracurricular competitive, which motivates me to push my limits and manage my time better.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good content but is fragmented and unclear in places. Try to structure your answer with clear sentences and use linking words to express your opinion smoothly.

Ejemplo: I would like some unnecessary rules to be changed. For example, all students have to tie up their hair to promote discipline, but I don't think this affects learning or academic performance. Personally, I find it quite uncomfortable.

Sugerencia: Your answer is meaningful but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas logically for better clarity.

Ejemplo: I plan to study medicine at Hong Kong University. Although I once dreamed of becoming an actress or singer, I now realise that medicine is more realistic, especially after some family members became seriously ill. Since no one in my family is a doctor, I want to fill that role.

× Currently I'm studying in. A high school in Causeway Bay, but recent years I transferred here from another high school.

✓ Currently I'm studying in a high school in Causeway Bay, but in recent years I transferred here from another high school.

The original sentence has a misplaced full stop and missing preposition 'in' before 'recent years', causing sentence fragmentation and unclear time reference. Correcting the punctuation and adding 'in' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Antwi food which is closer to where I live.

✓ At a school which is closer to where I live.

The phrase 'Antwi food' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Assuming it refers to a school name or location, 'At a school' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate location. Preposition 'at' is used for specific places.

× All of my peers and classmates are academically and extracurricular Lee competitive, which really pressured me into.

✓ All of my peers and classmates are academically and extracurricularly competitive, which really pressured me into.

The adverb 'extracurricular Lee' is incorrect; the correct adverb form is 'extracurricularly'. Using the correct adverb form modifies the adjective 'competitive' properly.

× Pushing my limits and utilize my time more efficiently so that I can achieve more like them.

✓ Pushing my limits and utilising my time more efficiently so that I can achieve more like them.

The sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb to connect it properly. Changing 'utilize' to 'utilising' matches the gerund form 'pushing' and creates parallel structure, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× I would say change up some unnecessary rules.

✓ I would say change some unnecessary rules.

The phrasal verb 'change up' is informal and unnecessary here. Simply using 'change' is more appropriate and grammatically correct in this context.

× All of the students have to tie up their hair when they go to school.

✓ All of the students have to tie their hair up when they go to school.

The phrasal verb 'tie up' is separable; the object 'their hair' should be placed between 'tie' and 'up' for correct usage.

× Meanwhile, I understand that they're trying to promote discipline, but personally I don't think that is significant too.

✓ Meanwhile, I understand that they're trying to promote discipline, but personally I don't think that is too significant.

The adverb 'too' should be placed before the adjective 'significant' to correctly modify it. Placing 'too' at the end is incorrect.

× Learning. And academic performance is.

✓ Learning and academic performance are.

The original is fragmented into two incomplete sentences. Combining them into one sentence with correct subject-verb agreement improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I actually find it quite uncomfortable.

✓ I actually find it quite uncomfortable.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Growing up, I've always wanted to become an actress or singer, but that is an unrealistic goal.

✓ Growing up, I've always wanted to become an actress or singer, but that was an unrealistic goal.

The phrase 'growing up' refers to the past, so the second clause should be in past tense 'was' to maintain tense consistency.

× And just recent years some of my family members are severely ill and I realized the importance of health care because no one in my family is doctor.

✓ And just in recent years some of my family members have been severely ill and I realized the importance of health care because no one in my family is a doctor.

The phrase 'just recent years' needs the preposition 'in' to be correct. The present perfect 'have been' is appropriate for ongoing past events. Also, 'is doctor' lacks the article 'a' before 'doctor'.

× So I want to become the family.

✓ So I want to become the family doctor.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the noun after 'family'. Adding 'doctor' completes the meaning. Also, 'the family doctor' is the correct phrase.