Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần rút ngắn và sắp xếp câu mạch lạc hơn, tránh nói lặp và tiếng thở dài. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích chụp (ví dụ: núi, bãi biển, chân dung bạn bè) và lý do (ví dụ: lưu giữ kỷ niệm, cảm xúc). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý như “because”, “for example” và kiểm soát số câu không vượt quá 4-5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph mountains and beaches when I travel because they look dramatic and peaceful. I also like taking pictures of my friends to capture our time together.

Sugerencia: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer rural areas) rồi giải thích lý do ngắn gọn, cụ thể (ví dụ: không khí trong lành, phong cảnh thiên nhiên). Tránh từ ngữ lặp và ngắt quãng bằng tiếng “uh”. Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để nối lý do và kết luận 1 câu hỗ trợ thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes and fresh air. For instance, I like hills and forests where I can relax and feel more connected to nature. This peaceful atmosphere helps me unwind.

Sugerencia: Trả lời rõ ràng ngay đầu (I prefer views in other countries) và đưa lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: đa dạng văn hóa, kiến trúc khác biệt). Tránh câu dài lặp ý; đưa 1 ví dụ cụ thể về quốc gia hoặc loại cảnh bạn muốn thấy. Sử dụng liên từ như “because”, “for example” để mạch văn logic và ngắn gọn (tối đa 4 câu).

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and architectural styles. For example, I want to visit Japan to see traditional temples and modern cityscapes. Experiencing those contrasts would be inspiring and educational.

× Yes, I do uh, I like to take the pictures of a different view like 1 to add to the phones or camera.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to take pictures of different views with my phone or camera.

The student used unnecessary articles: 'the pictures' should be general 'pictures' and 'a different view' should be plural 'different views' because they refer to photos in general. Also 'to the phones or camera' is incorrect; use 'with my phone or camera'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and match singular/plural and preposition usage.

× This will be gives me the different view like to uh, I want to have the take the picture feel like in sky in the mountains or beach or with my friends to say.

✓ This gives me different views, and I want the feeling of taking pictures in the sky, in the mountains, at the beach or with my friends.

Original mixes future 'will be gives' which is incorrect; 'gives' agrees with subject 'This'. Remove extra articles 'the' before 'different view' and 'the take the picture'. Prepositions: 'in the sky', 'in the mountains', 'at the beach'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual preferences and correct prepositions and article usage.

× I think I prefer the in ruler error because, you know, like the landscape and natural season, Uh, it's so different in with the another and want to do that.

✓ I think I prefer rural areas because the landscape and seasons are natural and different, and I want to experience that.

'the in ruler error' is unintelligible and should be 'rural areas'. 'Natural season' should be plural 'seasons'. 'It's so different in with the another' is incorrect structure; use 'different' and 'experience that'. Use simple present 'are' to describe general facts. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('rural') and simplify sentence structure.

× I can see the hill had their first air and feel like to have a connection with.

✓ I can see the hills have fresh air and I feel connected to them.

Original used past 'had' incorrectly; present 'have' matches 'can see'. 'Their first air' is wrong phrase; use 'fresh air'. 'Feel like to have a connection with' is ungrammatical; use 'I feel connected to them' or 'I feel a connection with them'. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('fresh air') and proper verb forms.

× I think I prefer view in another country like I have a lot of time to travel in my country, so I want to travel another country to find something else.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because I have already spent a lot of time traveling in my own country, so I want to visit other countries to find new things.

Use plural 'views in other countries'. 'I have a lot of time to travel in my country' should indicate completed experience: 'have already spent a lot of time traveling in my own country' or present perfect. 'Travel another country' should be 'visit other countries' or 'travel to other countries'. Suggestion: use plural nouns and appropriate tense (present perfect) to indicate past experience.

× For example, like in another country, that's where they have their different cultural, different their building and something is, is so development in my country.

✓ For example, in another country they have different cultures, different buildings, and some things are more developed than in my country.

'Different cultural' should be noun 'different cultures'. 'Different their building' incorrect order; use 'different buildings'. 'Something is, is so development in my country' should be 'some things are more developed than in my country'. Use comparative form 'more developed'. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms, correct word order, and use comparatives for comparison.