Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변은 질문에 직접 답했지만 표현이 자연스럽지 못하고 불필요한 말(uh, umm)이 많으며 문장이 비구조적입니다. 더 자연스럽게 말하기 위해 간단한 주제문을 사용하고, 이유를 한두 개의 구체적 예로 뒷받침하세요. 또한 발음을 명확히 하고 불필요한 중복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 ‘I prefer to store memories in my mind rather than taking photos because…’처럼 시작하고, 하나의 이유와 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: I don't usually take photos of views. I prefer to keep the memory in my mind because taking pictures can distract me from experiencing the moment. For example, when I visit a park I focus on the sounds and atmosphere rather than trying to photograph everything.

Sugerencia: 직접적으로 답했으나 문장 구조가 어색하고 단어 반복(‘urban’, ‘tallest tall’, ‘it it’)이 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤, 이유를 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 구체적으로 설명하세요. 형용사와 어휘를 정확히 쓰고 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하면 더 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of cityscapes and tall buildings. For example, skyscrapers and busy streets make me feel excited and inspired, especially at night when the lights are on.

Sugerencia: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 많은 중복과 단절된 문장이 있습니다. 질문의 의도를 정확히 파악해 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 후, 한두 개의 구체적 이유 또는 예를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 음성적 채우기(umm, uh)를 줄이고, 여행 경험이나 특정 국가의 경치에 대한 간단한 설명을 포함하면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: I prefer views in other countries when I travel because I like seeing different cultures and landscapes. For example, I enjoyed the unique architecture and natural scenery in Spain, which felt very different from what I see at home.

× Uh, actually I don't like taking pictures of something.

✓ Uh, actually I don't like taking pictures of things.

The speaker used 'something' where a general plural noun is required. When talking about taking pictures in general, use the plural 'things' or the uncountable phrase 'taking pictures' without 'something'. Use plural to match the general sense: 'taking pictures of things' or simply 'taking pictures'. Suggested improvement: replace 'something' with 'things' or omit the object: 'I don't like taking pictures.'

× I prefer to remember the memory of the scene.

✓ I prefer to remember the scene.

The phrase 'remember the memory' is redundant (memory already implies remembering) and awkward. Use the verb 'remember' directly with the object: 'remember the scene'. Suggested improvement: avoid redundancy: say 'I prefer to remember the scene' or 'I prefer to keep the memory of the scene.'

× The high, tallest tall building in the urban area is very nice to me and it it makes me lively.

✓ The tall, tallest buildings in urban areas are very nice to me and they make me feel lively.

Several problems: 'The high, tallest tall building' mixes adjectives and is ungrammatical; 'building' singular versus general preference should be plural 'buildings'; 'urban area' general plural 'urban areas' is more natural; 'it it' is repetition and should be 'they' to match plural subject; 'makes me lively' is awkward — use 'make me feel lively'. Suggested improvement: simplify adjective order and number: 'tallest buildings' or 'tall buildings', use plural verbs and pronouns to agree, and use 'feel' for states: 'they make me feel lively.'

× Do you prefer views of urban areas. Urban.

✓ Do you prefer views in urban areas?

The original has a sentence fragment 'Urban.' and uses 'of urban areas' which is acceptable but the examiner's question expects 'in urban areas' to contrast location. Use 'in' to indicate location and make it one sentence ending with a question mark. Suggested improvement: combine into a complete question: 'Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?' (Note: corrected for grammatical clarity.)

× Africa refuse in other countries, umm, when I when I go to travel abroad, uh, the scenery of uh. The place, uh. My book.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. When I travel abroad, I enjoy the scenery of each place.

This utterance is fragmented and contains nonsensical phrase 'Africa refuse' and repeated filler words. The intended meaning seems to be a preference for views in other countries; express that as a complete sentence. Also 'when I go to travel abroad' should be 'when I travel abroad'. 'The scenery of the place' should be 'the scenery of each place' or 'the scenery of the place'. Suggested improvement: avoid fragments and filler words; use complete sentences: 'I prefer views in other countries. When I travel abroad, I enjoy the scenery of the place.'