Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, singular/plural), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use one or two specific supporting details and a brief reason or example. Replace vague phrases like “one of my favorite scenes ever” with a precise description.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love photographing different views. I especially enjoy capturing sunsets because the warm colors and shifting clouds create striking contrasts. For example, last week I photographed a sunset over the sea where the orange sky reflected on the water, which made the picture very dramatic.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence and use correct adjectives and articles. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., “full of peaceful”) and filler hedging. Use linking words to contrast (however, whereas) and give a specific example of a rural scene you like. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and offer many picturesque scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and small farms where the light and shadows change throughout the day. In contrast, cities are often bustling, so it is harder to find quiet, scenic spots.

Sugerencia: Clarify your meaning and avoid unclear words (“wonderless”, “baton path”). State a clear preference or explain equally liking both with reasons. Use specific examples of what you want to photograph at home versus abroad. Remove fillers and correct grammar.

Ejemplo: I find it difficult to choose because I love photographing my country’s landscapes and cultural sites, but I also want to travel abroad to see new places. At home, I enjoy capturing traditional architecture and local markets, while abroad I would like to photograph unfamiliar coastlines and cities to broaden my portfolio.

× I always capture the sky, the clouds, and sunset.

✓ I always capture the sky, the clouds, and the sunset.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'sunset' when listing specific items; add 'the' to match 'the sky' and 'the clouds'. Suggestion: use consistent articles in lists.

× I think that the colors of the sky at sunset time is one of my favorite scenes ever.

✓ I think that the colors of the sky at sunset are one of my favorite scenes ever.

Subject 'the colors' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× I will not be bored about seeing it until the rest of my life, so I like that.

✓ I will never get bored of seeing it for the rest of my life, so I like that.

Use idiomatic preposition 'bored of' (or 'bored with') and verb phrase 'get bored'. 'Until the rest of my life' is not natural; use 'for the rest of my life'. Also use 'never' instead of 'not' for clarity.

× As a person who travels between city and countryside, I prefer rural views because they are full of peaceful and they have a lot of picturesque scenes.

✓ As a person who travels between the city and the countryside, I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and have many picturesque scenes.

Use definite articles 'the city' and 'the countryside' for general contrasts. 'Full of peaceful' is incorrect adjective/noun use; replace with 'peaceful'. 'A lot of' should be 'many' before plural noun 'picturesque scenes'. Also remove redundant 'they' after 'and'.

× But in the city, most of the time it is bustling, so I feel these things are missing somehow.

✓ But in the city, most of the time it is bustling, so I feel those things are missing somehow.

Use 'those things' to refer back to previously mentioned items (rural qualities); 'these' is less natural when contrasting. Grammatically both can work, but 'those' is clearer in context.

× It's a hard question because as a Palestinian girl I want to see everything in my country and capture it.

✓ It's a hard question because, as a Palestinian girl, I want to see everything in my country and capture it.

Add commas to set off the introductory phrase 'as a Palestinian girl' for correct sentence structure and clarity.

× But umm, as a wonderless person, I want to see different things and go to the baton path, so it's hard.

✓ But, to be honest, I want to see different things and go to new places, so it's difficult to decide.

'Wonderless' and 'baton path' are incorrect word choices. Replace with natural expressions: 'to be honest' (or 'as someone curious'), 'new places' instead of 'baton path'. 'Difficult to decide' fits the meaning better than 'it's hard'. Ensure vocabulary matches intended meaning.