Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid repetitions and incorrect words (e.g. "indifferently"). Use linking words like "for example" or "such as".

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Chiang Mai offers many different scenes, such as mountain landscapes and lively city streets. For example, I often photograph the mountain sunrise and busy shopping districts and send the best shots to my mother to show how I spend my free time.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a clear reason plus a specific example. Use correct grammar (e.g. "I'm staying" -> "I live") and link ideas with words like "because", "although", or "also". Avoid filler words like "umm".

Ejemplo: I prefer urban views because I live in the city and enjoy its energy and architecture. For instance, I like photographing city skylines and busy markets, although I also sometimes send photos of nearby parks to show I spend time in nature.

Sugerencia: Give a focused topic sentence, a clear reason, and a specific example. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure: use plural forms correctly and link clauses with "because" or "for example".

Ejemplo: I prefer views in my own country, Thailand, because it has diverse scenery within short distances. For example, I can visit mountains, beaches, and vibrant cities in a single weekend, which makes photographing local views convenient and enjoyable.

× we have a lot of real indifferently because we have a mountain, we have a city view and also we have a shopping mall view.

✓ we have a lot of different views because we have mountains, city views and shopping mall views.

The student used 'a lot of real indifferently' which is incorrect word choice and count. 'A lot of' should be followed by plural noun 'different views' when listing multiple types. Also 'a mountain' singular conflicts with the general statement; use plural or general noun forms ('mountains', 'city views', 'shopping mall views'). Use 'different' instead of 'indifferently'. Suggestion: replace incorrect phrase with 'a lot of different views' and pluralize the listed items.

× So I always send it to my mom to share that I spend a lot of time with a lot of many different.

✓ So I always send them to my mom to show that I spend time in many different places.

The original sentence has incorrect object reference and redundant quantifiers ('a lot of many different') and unclear structure. 'It' should refer to plural 'pictures' so use 'them'. 'Share that I spend a lot of time' is awkward; use 'to show that I spend time in many different places.' Suggestion: use clear pronouns matching number and avoid redundant quantifiers.

× I prefer the urban areas because I'm staying in the city and the urban area is very beautiful for me.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I live in the city and urban areas are very beautiful to me.

The continuous 'I'm staying' implies temporary action; 'I live' is correct for habitual residence. 'The urban area is' should match plural 'urban areas' for general preference. 'Beautiful for me' is non-idiomatic; use 'beautiful to me.' Suggestion: use simple present for habitual facts and match singular/plural consistently.

× I always send umm, the natural views to my family to share with them that I'm spend some time with the nature as well.

✓ I always send natural views to my family to show them that I spend some time in nature as well.

After 'I'm' the verb must be in present participle form ('spending') if using progressive: 'I'm spending some time' or use simple present 'I spend some time'. Also 'with the nature' is incorrect preposition/article use; correct is 'in nature'. 'To share with them that' is awkward; 'to show them that' is clearer. Suggestion: use either 'I'm spending' or 'I spend' and use 'in nature'.

× I prefer my own country here, Thailand.

✓ I prefer my own country, Thailand.

Comma set-off is sufficient; 'here' is unnecessary and awkward in this context. No article is needed before country name when used appositively. Suggestion: remove 'here' or rephrase: 'I prefer my own country, Thailand.'

× I really, really love my country because here we have a lot of view sharing with many people with mountain views, beach view or the city view.

✓ I really love my country because we have many views to share with people, such as mountain views, beach views, and city views.

'A lot of view' is ungrammatical; use 'many views' or 'a lot of views'. The list items should be plural and parallel: 'mountain views, beach views, and city views.' 'Sharing with many people with mountain views' is awkward; rephrase to 'views to share with people.' Suggestion: use plural nouns for general categories and parallel structure when listing.